Chapter Five

The street lights blurred together as I pushed the accelerator. Time had no value as I flew past red lights and stunned drivers. My destination was Landon’s house, hoping out of hope that I wasn’t too late. The car tyres squealed with disagreement as I round the second to last corner. The smell of burning rubber filled the car like smoke. My heart pumped adrenaline to every vein in my body fuelling my recklessness, but then…immediately after I passed yet another red light, I heard the piercing sound of a car horn coming from my left. Turning my head in the last second, I saw two bright lights travelling towards me…

“Alice, I don’t know if you can hear me, but please, I’m begging you come back. I need you” the voice whispered. The darkness was fading now, fading fast. I could now feel my body, the soft quilts of a bed and the gentle lips as they kissed my hand. And then, with a shock I realised who the voice belonged to…

I’m here! I screamed, as my eyes snapped open to the bright lights of a hospital room. I gasped as I frantically searched for the source of that voice. And there, holding my hand like it was the most precious thing in the world, sat my one true love.

 

*The end*

Author's Note

And thats the power of love! thank you for reading and be sure to leave a review with any suggestions you may have. I'm open to constructive critisism. :)

Sunflower

Reviews

[SuicidePact.]

This was a really great short book!

you had all the great parts in it, no need to drag them all out into pages and pages on boring details, it was straight to the point.

loved it. thanks for sharing.

[Meat of Dog]

Wow, what a great ending! There's a feeling of distance, with a fairytale ending of getting her love. This is more like a story to me than a book. I think that would be your better bet because in order to make it any longer you would have to rework and add to the plot. I think this way is really good as is.

I would add a little more to her distraught and frightened state toward the finish. Such as, how her feelings of sadness and pain caused her to get into the crash. A little more elaboration on her feelings will ad depth to the impact of this ending.

This was a nice story of love, and having the patience to wait for it. I liked it a lot!

other suggestions:
-" The car tyres squealed" Tires

[Nothing Personal]

This was perfect as a story and it's even more racy and exciting as a book. Great job SF I loved it..

[Call Me Blu]

I need this longer hon, you have got to expand. It is a sweet ending but it feels abrupt. I need a little more actin here, maybe Sam bursts in. It is ok, but more is better than less!
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