Oh my, I think the Devil is flirting with me.

Not what you think.

I would really like a dance love.

But you can take your time.

For you really are divine.

 

Let me wine and dine you.

Can't you see, it is only a matter of time?

Don't leave me lonely.

 

Behind your pixie eyes I see many lies.

That I have not even begun to pick apart.

Your ties to me are numerous, can't you see?

 

Now it is all true what they say about me.

That is why I will set you free.

Take you into a world you have only dreamt of before.

 

We have met before you and I.

But never face to face.

 

Behind the cloak of purity.

As you chase after a image of you that was never real.

You've always felt me there, have you not?

 

I can feel you melt beneath my gaze already.

Now stand steady love...

This won't hurt a bit.

 

Author's Note

I have NO idea what this is. I was just feeling really random and have no illusions about it flowing, or that they rhyming works, or that it conveys images or makes you feel emotions, it's crappy I know but it was written on a whim.

Reviews

[L.G. Knight]

It flowed well the rhymeing worked well too it was in sinc with the randomness of the poem to create and wonderful blend of confusion, kind of like you would feel if in the dpths of passion or fear. The poem leave you open to imagine the charater in either state and leaves it open to be appropriate for different views. I tend to find that sometimes our worst work is really our best, It is amazingly well done especially for eing a whim, but then all my poetry is a whim.

Well Done!

~Frances~

P.S. Never doubt your work or other will doubt it as well. =)

[PhoeniX]

this was good. keep it up. random thoughts and feelings usually produce the best kind of work

[Jason]

It seemed to flow so nice! It feels as though i am dancing with the words that you write..

[R J Askew]

Well, it has a interest-arousing title that is certain. And the present tense works well. There is an air of risk about it, as if the walk on the dark side might prove exciting, but then the last two lines suggest something unpleasant...as Count Dracula bears his fangs perhaps! But then the note at the top suggests that this reading might be wrong. Enigmatic!

[Steffi]

"Let me wine and dine you.
Can't you see, it is only a matter of time?
Don't leave me lonely.

Behind your pixie eyes I see many lies.
That I have not even begun to pick apart."

[Sara]

i actually really like it, especially:

'We have met before you an I.
But never face to face.
Behind the cloak of purity.
As you chase after a image of you that was never real.
You've always felt me there, have you not?'

because it's a tad creepy but romantic and strange all in one. very interesting.