Guilt

All about guilt and silence towards yourself

Your blood splashes on the floor.

 

One drop for all the things you saw but never spoke of.

One drop for all the words you wanted to say.

Then another for all the times you beat yourself down.

Another for all the smiles sent your way that you rejected.

 

This one is for the hidden motives that were never in their eyes.

A dozen more for the ones you pushed away.

Countless drops from all the emotions you kept inside.

 

Just a few more, for good measure--for all the pleasure you wouldn't let yourself feel.

Both emotional and physical.

 

After all, you don't care do you?

Now, it's not fair what happened to you.

That you were broken into shards.

But instead of putting yourself back together.

You are bleeding yourself away

 

You wonder why no one notices--why no one cares.

But that's because you never wanted them and now it's getting to be too late.

And as your blood slips away..

So does your time.

 

Reviews

[MaximumFlight]

Very morbid and emotional. Wonderful job.

[PhoeniX]

"But that's because you never wanted them and now it's getting to be too late.
And as your blood slips away..
So does your time"

-----that is the best part. we all go through so many moments in our lives that sometimes, when we feel the pain, we don't want anyone to see. but then we do want people to see. we want that caring hand to come out and reach to us, but if we feel that want, it would be selfish of us to ask for it. when we are the ones going through the pain and its our fault.

good job!

[Steffi]

"This one is for the hidden motives that were never in their eyes.
A dozen more for the ones you pushed away.
Countless drops from all the emotions you kept inside.

Just a few more, for good measure--for all the pleasure you wouldn't let yourself feel"

[Edward Clay]

this is highly cryptic, and the reader has no clear indication of what is going on, but the actual poem is fluid -to me, for some reason, it represented water, just in terms of the words used and the feelings evoked.
the poem may have rejected smiles, but i hope it doesnt reject the fact that i like this poem, haha.
Clay.

[Riley]

This makes me think (Uh oh). It makes me think alot. I like how it has so many different meaning and many different ways that people could interpet it. Great job. I love you.

[Erin Sky]

pretty groovy, I like that the blood has multiple meanings within the piece.