When You Look To The West

The lady sings her song of longing,
A forlorn tale of endless strife;
Every breath still bears the bane of death,
With bitter taste of wasted life.

It seems she has forgotten laughter,
A sound lovely, haunting, and light;
Cold creeps in as her jaded heart sleeps,
The kingdom growing black as night.

Defiant cries are lost to the wild wind,
Wicked fires blaze and scorch the lands;
Golden leaves glow for all she wants to show,
But dull is the blade in her hands.

Take up the cursed cause of the fallen,
O noble Lady shroud in silhouette;
Weep no more but find your place in lore,
Lead us on into the golden sunset!

Ride the last shining road out of Heaven,
For its glorious doors are shut to you still;
With crown of light and will to stand and fight,
O Lady lead the sun beyond the West hill!

Author's Note

Inspired by Led Zeppelin's "Stairway to Heaven" and J.R.R. Tolkien's Lord of the Rings trilogy. Let me know if it seems confusing or incomplete.

Reviews

[Pinkkatielyn]

Wow, this is just amazing

[Wolfwind]

It's not confusing and I think the flow of imagery and story begin and end at the right point. The only thing that made this piece hickcup a bit, is that some of the lines drag because of a greater number of spoken beats, thus throwing off the timing. But that's just my opinion. :)
Over all I thought it was a great work of ink!

Aaron

[December Blaize]

Yeah, it's really hard for me to get the beats/rhythm right, so the lines don't drag. I'm working on that. If I find a way to fix those "hickupy" spots, I will. Thanks for your feedback!