Perfect to Me

Cute but short poem written for my boyfriend.

I sleep with a smile when I dream of you
I'm so glad that we're happy after all we've been through 

I find myself falling for your adorable grin
The one that makes all the heart aches begin

The ache to be held within both your arms
The happiness I feel to be under your charms

When I wake in the morning I only long for you 
You're beyond amazing it's simple and true 

I can't explain the great emotions that you allow me to feel 
Every second spent with you is so enchanting it feels unreal 

So wether it be now or when I'm twenty three
Let it be forever known that you're perfect to me 

And just incase you're wondering if I am being true
Then listen to these simple words: (His Name), I love you 

Author's Note

So what do you think? :)

Oh! Twenty three isn't some random number, it has meaning behind it.

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Nice poem, it definitely portrays how much love and ... all that other sweet stuff (sorry I'm not really for the cutesy romantic stuff) you feel for him. Even though I don't really go for this kind of things you certainly made it easy for readers to connect and relate. The rhyming pattern was nicely done as well. It also adds to the poem to have something that is intricate to you that shall remain a mystery that people will puzzle over if trying to figure out the meaning of your poem (i.e. twenty-three).

If you don't mind me telling you (I'm an editor and this is second nature) you spelled "wether" wrong, it's "whether." And "incase" is two words (i.e. in case). Also, if you don't mind me giving you some advice, I think it would be more natural and poetic if you didn't use (His Name) and put an actual name there. If you don't want to use his real name it would be better to use a fake name. These are just suggestions and observations, I hope you don't mind.

Very good poem.

[St.Jimmy]

yea twenty three is random but you can't put thirty three there :D
all in all you wrote an awesome poem with a perfect flow

[BlackRose]

wow, this is good. Also kindda sweet. Whats twenty three stand for? Is it like his jersey number or something? Just curious.