Selfish

Feel the pressure
Thrashing, kicking
Trying to get out.
Blackening my insides
I don't know what it's about.
Pressing back
I make it worse
Coming at me from each side.
Dizzy, nearly tipping over
Get me off this ride.
Screams are muffled deep inside me
Wishing you could hear.
Wanting you to save me from it
Take away my fear.
Anger builds it tears me up
Where are you in my need.
Teeth are gnashing
Hope is crashing
Hate grows like a weed
Something breaks and off I rush
To point
To blame
To curse
To yell and scream and tell you
It is I that has it worse.
Blind with rage I take direction
Finding you alone.
That's when I see you
Drown
Inside a puddle of your own.

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Interesting but not my favourite of yours. Love your writing though and will read it all; and I am fussy!

[Eagle Cruagh]

Raw and nasty, "Drown inside a puddle of
your own."
It sounds like a "stream of consciense",
well written, exploratory, imaginative and
exciting.
----- John

[Monday Parker]

This is great!!! It flows so easily down the page, and the words you use are so descriptive.
"That's when I see you
Drown
Inside a puddle of your own." -My favorite lines- it really paints the picture and sends the final punch of your words. Great job

[Summer]

Thank you so much. Those are some of my favorite lines too. Thank you so much for sharing this page with me.

[Antonio Valentino]

its something we all fight ever since we were born..

the first step is acknowledging it, which youve done here wonderfully

:)

[Summer]

Thank you. It's one of my worst faults so I write about it often. I appreciate your kind review.

[Antonio Valentino]

aww thats okay.. i once knew a self centered salmon.. it was, selfish, too like me.. lol

[zainul]

Great write
Loved the sentence,"Screams are muffled deep inside me."

[Summer]

Thanks for the kind review :) And the add

[zainul]

You are always welcome.
I did not want to miss a talented person like you.

[Taylor Ann]

I love this piece. Especially the metaphor, "Hate grows like a weed." I loved the language in this piece, I could really relate to the feeling you were getting across. It was brilliantly written. I loved it.

[Summer]

Thank you for the kind review. You were my very first so it's nice to hear your positivity.