I really enjoyed this. I love the rhythm and the message its successfully getting across. The length of each line, I find, help the reader.
But I must say one thing, how you make every line begin with a capital letter seems to disturb the flow. I think if you only made the lines after the end of a sentence capitalize it would be easier to read.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
I know. I don't like it either, but my computer automatically does that. :( oh well. But thanks for .. read moreI know. I don't like it either, but my computer automatically does that. :( oh well. But thanks for the nice review! :)
12 Years Ago
Ha ha, no problem. And yeah, my computer normally does that too by if you press [shift] and then [en.. read moreHa ha, no problem. And yeah, my computer normally does that too by if you press [shift] and then [enter] it won't automatically capitalize the letter and it'll make the lines closer together, which is kind of a good thing. I also find that even though it automatically capitalizes if you go back and uncapitalize (I know that's not a word) it it'll stay that way. Sorry, I'm probably being annoying now. I'll shut up. :)
wOw! all of your poems are inspiring to me and this is the best by far. You have a gift for seeing things for what they truly are. Keep writing things like this, I will read them!
I really enjoyed this. I love the rhythm and the message its successfully getting across. The length of each line, I find, help the reader.
But I must say one thing, how you make every line begin with a capital letter seems to disturb the flow. I think if you only made the lines after the end of a sentence capitalize it would be easier to read.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
I know. I don't like it either, but my computer automatically does that. :( oh well. But thanks for .. read moreI know. I don't like it either, but my computer automatically does that. :( oh well. But thanks for the nice review! :)
12 Years Ago
Ha ha, no problem. And yeah, my computer normally does that too by if you press [shift] and then [en.. read moreHa ha, no problem. And yeah, my computer normally does that too by if you press [shift] and then [enter] it won't automatically capitalize the letter and it'll make the lines closer together, which is kind of a good thing. I also find that even though it automatically capitalizes if you go back and uncapitalize (I know that's not a word) it it'll stay that way. Sorry, I'm probably being annoying now. I'll shut up. :)
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