Love of You, and I

This is a romantic poem, that would truly open the hearts of, everyone I wish a better love story, this is a blessing for all of you. and this is to be read like a poem

           Oh, though all is beauty towards my eyes, only that of yours, may be lovely,

           As you must know, I could not control my fulfilled love for you, as you do so, 

          Loving you, as I could be in the falsehood for not, may our love never hold lust,

         Though, all I say to you, may be loving, you should understand, I only want true,

          My, My, My only reason for the want of living, is so I may see you, that is you,

               

            Although you may not love me, I would, I would in my heart, keep you high,

     Although we may fight, this is how every true love story goes, as is ours, very          true, Some, some idiot may call you ugly, but they could never understand, your true  beauty,Not only are you beautiful outside, you are even more extremely beautiful  inside,Not only are you, beautiful, but as a higher state, you are also a down to heart  person,

            

             Truth is this love, love this is truth, this is our form of love, not biased,

           There could have been many guys, but you have chosen me, over the millions,

           I, I, I just control my feelings for you, but, the control to say the truth is pain,

             I wish only for you to get, get a better life, it may or may not be our fate, 

         But, you are always going to be my love, this I could not control, I, I, I love you,

             

             You, always get my eye, even if I was a billion dollars, may I never enjoy myself, without you,Even, even if I could have every other girl, they are just not like you, you are unique,These words I say, they are not strong enough, to even describe, a simple part of you,You are so beautiful, that even the, even the princes and kings would want you,But, I guess, I would be even more lucky than them, if I could have someone like you,

             

         Lust, even an evil like that, it could not even touch us, as we have unbreakable bonds,Not only are you my love, but you are my ultimate true friend, and we will always be true,Love, it is good, but if I felt love before, then I would have no idea, what is this,You and I, are better than casual girlfriend, and boyfriend, we are true to each other,I am truly blessed, that you would go love me, of all the people, I have the best gift, of you!!

Reviews

[Sakshi]

You can re-construct the flow of the poem...instead of long lines, use an "ENTER" and begin with another line...that way it becomes more attractive for the readers...

Great piece,
Keep writing,
Cheers!

[Sukhmeet Singh]

I tried that, really didn't work out so well, but could you tell me what else I am missing

[Sakshi]

Example:

Oh, though all is beauty towards my eyes,
only that of yours, may be lovely,
As you must know,
I could not control my fulfilled love for you,
as you do so,

this gives a definite flow to your words. line by line.

hope it helps!

[Sukhmeet Singh]

Is the Beauty of Life Poem, a better follower of this concept

[Sakshi]

I ain't a professional writer, and certainly not wise enough to advice you certain concepts of writing. It was just a suggestion, as your unbiased reader, that the flow could be little smoother; which goes for "Beauty of Life" too.
If your individuality is in this way of writing, I respect it!

[Sukhmeet Singh]

Thank you for appreciating my form of writing

[IDon'tKnow]

This was a really cool poem ^^ great job.

[Sukhmeet Singh]

Thanks

[Zeph]

N-N-Niice :)
I'm no poet, so can't give any constructive criticism, all I can say atm is that I reaally liked it :)

[Sukhmeet Singh]

Thanks for reading