Please Remember Me Now

Please Remember Me Now

where have you gone baby?

I'm waiting for you here

Where have you left me sweetie ?

I'm dying alone here ..

 

Why haven't you given me a last look?

Why haven't you let me hear your voice ?

Why haven't you written me the last letter ?

Why have you forgotten  me ?

 

The waves are dancing in front of my eyes

The birds are leaving above my head

The trees are saying goodbye for the last time

The soul is leaving for the first time...

 

Please, come back my love

Please, teach me how to live

Please, please, please, please...

Remember me now .....

25/5/2012

6:10 Pm

Author's Note

Im here ...remember me !!
I hope you like this :)

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

This poem speaks the desires of a lonely soul, and these are very intense emotions that you express through pen. I particularly loved that third stanza and how you proclaim that the 'trees are saying goodbye,' that was clever and intriguing indeed! Well done!

[Scytheriax]

This reminds me so much of the game Amnesia, with Aloise. That's such a bizarre connection to make, but it's a similar story to how he must have felt about Justine.

I really liked the emotion of the piece. It's palpable; the reader definitely knows how the narrator feels and it's expressed with simple but clear diction.

I particularly liked the third stanza; that one is definitely my favorite.

The last critique I have is that there is no space between the last word of a sentence and the punctuation for that sentence.

[Senseless whatever]

Good work. Sad and calling out for that someone. Gives the feeling of being alone in an empty room.

[Perfect Mistake]

"Please, teach me how to live" I like this line. Very good work :3

This Poem is cute, well written. It is natural and doesn't require advance vocab.

[Shy Girl]

This was very pretty and I'm sure whoever it is remembers you just fine.
Such a nice piece
Great job!!

[Carrion.]

love this.
so much.
Keep it up.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

This poem is compatible with many types of conflicts, not just a romantic one...which makes this poem kinda neat.

And the third stanza is my favorite one.
:)

[emman]

Its not easy to be forgotten by the one you loved..sad but I liked the poem so much..keep writing! SMILE :)

[just is]

Oh wow, this is so emotional, i enjoyed this write.