The Thief Love

He loved her

She did too

But the problem is

They forgot everything

Just there love was all the things..

 

She forgot our friendship

And when I used to hug her

And tell her

You will find someone..

 

But now all what she do

Is look at me

And say :”who are you ?”

I answer sadly :

”I’m the one that was always behind you “..

 

I just walk on and see him there

The one that always look at me

And hold me in my sad times

He looked at me like I was a part of the moving air.

 

I stood there behind a tree

And looked toward this big city

And shouted till I was tired

I said everything in my heart and mind ..

But I was sure that no one was listening.

 

He and she went away

Without telling me anything from that day

They traveled to another country and lived there

And now I have no friends or even my babe .

 

Now everything in this world

Just move so fastly

And don’t look behind

It step on someone’s hearts

To complete two.

But I’m sure baby

I will never be with you ..

Author's Note

I just wrote that ,it is obvious i think from all the mistake ..
I hope you like it :)

Reviews

[khalid]

i like the idea and the sequence of events. it is really sad and effective

[Senseless whatever]

Writing from the hip like this is awesome. The raw emotion and imagery flows freely from you. Hit this with those few corrections to make the flow a bit smoother and you have a fantastic write. One of your finest maybe.

[Susan]

Nice Piece of work! It is touching when you right how you were there for that person but she forgot who you were. I interpret this as figuretive, a way to show how that person isn't interested in you. very real, very relevant to people's lives and I am sure ithers can relate.

[Cassie Fraga]

can really feel the hurt in this write... you do you sis... sometimes letting it go is what we need to be ok... like I always say with every sad, aching, long a*s day that goes by eventually that stain will fade... keep ya head up!!

[Mohamed Hani]

”I’m the one that was always behind you “..
touchy...
great one

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Great work..!!!

[Layla Anne Massaro]

This broke my heart. It was so sad to read a poem like this. I have felt this before and it sucks like hell. Great poem. Love the font.

[Parashar]

true love always comes back ......... well written

[Kim's Poems]

So sad, but liked it.
Amazingly written.