It is just an illusion …

It is just an illusion …

I know it is just something I imagine

Being with you or feeling your beauty,

I’m sure you are more mature than me

And you know things more than I do.

 

Loving you might not be real

I’m a teenager and this is not equivalent deal,

You know much things in this life

But I’m still testing it …

 

Doors of life

Are not fully opened yet

So is me ..

 

Man,

I know what I see it just an illusion

I’m sorry for this wrong words …

 

Teens must not trust their feelings

Cause they mistake a lot

But they have their rights

To love ,to leave freely

They have their own wonder  world

From girls of their make up to their cloths

And boys from their dates to their best games …

We all have illusions

Just like the one I had toward you …

 

25/11/2011

11:22 AM

Author's Note

I know it is not nice ,not even good..
But just something i thought about :)
Enjoy as much as you can ...

Reviews

[Sleeping Maiden]

Aww, it's not that bad. =) Don't be too harsh on your writing. I liked it and i love the message. It's true. We all have this "illusions" that we go through because our life is just starting. It's true to not always trust our own feelings because anything can complicate them and make us think we truely are in love or whatever it may be. It just depends on the situation.. and how we respond..
Great write though!! =D I enjoyed it.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Thoughtful..!!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

i like the truth in the last stanza

[Shy Girl]

Freedom to live, love, and be...that's a concept right there. All three would be great, (at once, at least to me) We are all so busy reacting, not knowing what is or isn't. Very nice piece, even if you don't think so. Thought it was a well thought out piece, myself. :)

[Andrea Vargas]

'Loving you might not be real
I’m a teenager and this is not equivalent deal'

[khalid]

im with you in that, but use your mind not to get hurt

[screamin'ian]

Yes, we all have our illusions. Sometimes we have delusions, when we lie to ourselves because it feels good or is easier than facing what's real. It appears that you are aware of this. I applaud your courage and strength. This is fine work.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

I totally love this piece, it is great, has so much wisdom and maturity shown in it....
And I agree totally with the fact that everyone has a freedom to love and feel love.... age doesn't matter in that fact.....you learn as you live, one hopes and strives for it anyways....Amazing poetry :)

[Tai Ryens]

This was great, what are you talking about? And yes, this happens to everyone, there is a time where we don't trust ourselves because we complicate ourselves too much. Sometimes I guess, it's better to look at the more simple part of life. This was well thought out, and I definitely enjoyed it.

[Thea]

No way! This is actually nice!
Such an interesting thought...
Well done...
:)))