I love you my monsoon

I love you my monsoon

 

My feelings can't be hidden anymore

My eyes are showing it all iin one look or more

Your picture became my lenses and my only crown

When I talk to you in public or alone

I forget in life something called “frown "

And the smile would be intently drawn ...

 

when you hear my smiles that are flown

You'd say Cupids bow is really thrown

And the trees in my heart are fully grown

With your love that is making me fall

And made me forget that i was a strong stone...

 

My love to you can’t be shown

On the clouds or the full moon

And i could help you to be sure

That i love you my monsoon ..

Author's Note

Hope you all like it ...
and baby you are my monsoon ........

Reviews

[Jeremy Baker]

Living in the South West of Australia I can only guess at what a monsoon feels like, but the feeling of love and longing is all too clear - a lovely sentiment, well expressed.

[khalid]

this is fantastic piece. it is really cheerful, light and romantic. i really loved it. you even selected nice font and color to write it, and moreover the font is clearer this time than any time before. just want remind you of using punctuation marks to make your work perfect. keep on

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I like the nature allusions

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Lovely..

[Thea]

Oh, so wonderful...
Such feelings you have for that someone...
Great piece...
:)))

[Tai Ryens]

Nice piece, but the flow could use a little work. What I mean is that a couple of lines in your poem, most of them being in the first stanza, are able to confuse some writers to what it really says, so the word positioning can use a little work. Great job, keep it up!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

So romantic and beautiful....you write such awesome romantic poems, I so love ech and every one of them,

"With your love that is making me fall
And made me forget that i was a strong stone."

utterly marvellous :)

[Sweets]

total awesomeness D:
has a wonderful awesome flow...

[Andrea Vargas]

this is a sweet emotion that you have displayed.. Well done (: