Goodbye is the solution …

Goodbye is the solution …

 

When those days were going behind

And being forgotten under the leaves of the night

I couldn’t say a thing except a goodbye

From this day and on there is no you and I

It is just for the last eye to eye

So we should face this scene this time

And do not cry for the last time…

Goodbye’s ain’t easy

They just need a rock heart

They need someone like you and me …

 

Baby, you say love is a big thing

But I say love is everything

I wish that we could stay forever

But for now a goodbye

Is the solution ….

Author's Note

Hope you like this :)
i just wrote that ...

Reviews

[SOUL LESS]

Sometimes beginnings aren't so simple
Sometimes goodbye's the only way....
Great song that. :) The poem...yes, well the subject matter is fine. I cannot relate so i can't really comment on that. As to the english...lemme see.
Possible revisions...

1. going behind: slipping by.
2. cut the "a" in the third line. and use "..." b/w except and goodbye
3. ain't destroys the romantic flow..it should be aren't anyway. grammar error.

As for the last stanza..."big thing" should be replaced. I can't find the exact words though :)
Some of my revisions have to do with grammar but mostly with flow...
Nice write :)

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good show..!!!

[marybeth davis]

this is so sweet and sad mixed together! i love thanks for the write:)

[Cassie Fraga]

sometimes love just isn't the best thing for two people in time.
I love this read... can relate to it in so many different ways!!
keep the ink flowin I loved it!!

[Dove]

I liked the poem, great job. One thing about the word "goodbye" is that it's so powerful, I actually don't like to say that word I always say something like see you later. But this is a really good poem. enjoyed reading it.

[EMF]

Goodbye can be a wonderful word. Though it has a temporary heartbreak, people get over it. Then there's the freshness of new. New life, new friends, new lovers, new homes. A terrific poem, and not dripping with apin and suffering, just a matter of fact goodbye. Great work

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Heartbreak's gotta hurt...

[Andrea Vargas]

I enjoyed it and it really symobolizes the ability of a teen heart in anguish.. the format is a little astray but so is the teen heart so great write

[Thea]

Aw...So emotional...Goodbye is such a hurtful word... :(((
I like this though quiet poignant...
:)))

[khalid]

so nice poem fill with emotion spite of the sad end

[Tai Ryens]

" Goodbye's ain't easy "
Very much true, they're in face one of the most hardest things to say and do. Beautiful piece here, keep it up!