I'll never be sad

You love me as I do

But you hurt  me so deep

You don’t trust me

But I truly do …

 

Boy, you say you are sorry

Nut trust me

Not need to say it

You are that cloud

That rain just happiness over me …

 

You keep my smile on

And take my tears off

Then throw them in the sea

And look toward me and smile back …

 

Boy,I’ll never be sad

Be sure

But sometimes

We love to hear that apology

That make us feel thrilled

And then

We could be sure

That you love us

This is why

I want your apology

But trust me

I love you

 

23/10/2011

5:18 PM

Author's Note

Hope you like this guys :D

Reviews

[HeIsWe]

Heartfelt, hope, meaningful. I love it!

[Andrea Vargas]

a beauty of of love and hope..

[Dove]

Such a heartfelt poem. I love how its simple and meaningful. Great job!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

So heartfelt and cute pic too!

[Sleepless]

i love it the pem i love it !!!:) it is amazing !:)

[khalid]

simple and meaningful

[LittleMissSunshine :)]

This is pretty good.
I'll give you that, and it gives me hope for you as a poet.
But there's a bunch of terrible lines in here, and simple mistakes that kind of ruin it.
I simply cannot stress this enough in my reviews:
BE DRAMATIC! SIMPLICITY doesn't cut it!
Meaning, don't type in overused words, or use phrases previously published.

[Tai Ryens]

Salty sea, and you throw your tears in it. Is that how salty your tears are? I don't know, that just popped into my mind, haha. Wonderful write, sweet, and altogether a great piece. It's sweet to know you trust him that much. Amazing job!

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Truly a wonderful write, quite amazing

[Thea]

How sweet...Great piece...Truly beautiful! :)))