The laying monster

 

The Laing  monster

 

When I was first introduced to you

I thought you are great

Cause you looked pretty and neat

You were smart

That’s what I was told …

 

But now

10 years from knowing you

I realized that you are not more than

A monster that is wearing a mask

You were not more than

A black devil that hate me

I thought you would love me ..

 

I’m not your style

I will not smile like you

Or laugh about your silly jokes

I will not be a liar like you

You don’t look great

After I saw that monster

You are like a dirty cat

Covered by piggy mud

I hate you now

Yes now I said that

But I should have said that in your face

From 10 years

You love them all

But you hate me

I don’t know why !!

 

But if I would think about the reasons

I will tell

Because I’m covered by a feather

In your mind ..

Because I say I’m mad when I am

Because I don’t wear like you

Because I have the greatest friends ever

And you don’t

Because and because …

I will not finish this

But you must know

That you are not

The person that I would be glad to know …

I hate you and for now just go ..

And don’t wave a goodbye .

 

4/9/2011

5:57 Pm

Suhad

Author's Note

I wrote this to someone that I really don’t like, but don’t take an idea that I hate people but when you feel that you are hated you are obliged to hate this person, and you can’t live on a lie forever you should wash your face one day and see your picture in the mirror clearly and see your life closer,with an open wide eyes and you would be obliged to hate some people that don’t care about you and step on you like you are mop you would stand up and say in loud that you hate this person ..Or am I wrong ? if so just tell me I would be glad to listen to your opinions ..

Thanks for reading this  and I hope you enjoy :D

Reviews

[EMF]

A terrific vent. Someone has obviously pressed the wrong buttons with you, over a long time. Often people on WC will comment on you, rather than the poem. I don't intend to. The poem itself is strong and clear, but may use a little tightening up in the odd place. Places where emotion overtakes your craft. I can't really spot them, but am aware that it needs a little tweak. Beyond that there is some fearsome imagry and deliscious venom in this. It also radiates strength from the retaliation is shows. As a poem it stands up to its role. It makes me glad I read it. It is also nice to see someone trying something different, against the 'love' poetry that dominates And now the paternalistic advice...What do I know? You're the poet, and know your craft better than I.

[Riki Tagle Alqmvist]

Great rant there without sounding annoying. :D

[Sleepless]

hummmn this happened to me last year ! this year i dont really care anymore but true when someone hates you they make you hate them i get you :) but well amzig poem !:)

[Dayran]

Its called a man, lady. It matures with age.

[Dove]

It's sad but you expressed your feelings very well in this piece. I love the honesty and im glad you shared this. Great write.

[Jeremy Baker]

Let it out and take control of these feelings - don't let them dominate you.

[Thea]

You expressed your feelings very well...Nice poem... :)))

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

I love this poem very evocative and masterful in your engagement that conveys itself to the reader...I love your viewpoints expressed too...stunning piece and I would hate this person too a little... wonderful and I love it:)

[Sweets]

This is really great and honest :)
I think it's okay to write about it =3
Great poem!
I loved this! :)