She loves you

She was sitting there on her desk beside the window , when the rain was falling hardly , she was sitting there writing for him days, years, centuries but he didn’t feel ..she was sending all of her messages with that bird, that have felt love from her crying eyes even his heart aches .. she was always waiting for him and looking out of the window..

 

One day she saw his mirage, she thought that it was him.. she thought  that it was him ,she went out as a thirsty person who found a lake , she ran toward him barefoot and he was running away ..she ran and ran like they were playing  catch me .. till she arrived to a mountain ..very high mountain his mirage was gone , she fell on the ground and started crying and yearning , she decided to go back home maybe she see him again ..

When she arrived she saw all of her poems, letters, for him were scattered and shattered all over her room ,  she only found one paper that was good, it was written on it :

“I did all of that , I’m the one you always loved, but I will never love you “

She read that and held the paper hugged it tightly, because he touched that, she took all the scattered papers and began hugging them all just like he was the one between her arms, she felt every beautiful thing in the world just when she was thinking about his touch ,she hugged them till her mind stopped ,her eyes stopped seeing and in this moment everything stopped except his heart, even when she died it was still beating for him ..

Author's Note

it is a diaster i know

Reviews

[Black]

work on the lay out.

i liked the last paragraph though ,
nice work

[AndyJCash]

I especially liked the first paragraph, it had a very nice poetic-prose mix.

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This is not a disaster. It's short heart-wrenching piece. Although you should read through it once more to correct the few grammatical mistakes here and there. Despite that, it's well written. The speaker seems to be genuinely in love but borderline obsessive yet the description in the second paragraph makes it seem sane. Nice work.

[EMF]

A real nice work. Good work there and stop downing yourself. You're better than that

[Sleepless]

no its beautiful and traic its great1:)

[ecept]

Such a heart~tugger. I could actually feel this write. Sad really!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Nooo it's not a disaster and this does relate so well as to love that is one-sided and some people we just can't help but love and fall in love with and it lasts until the day we die, it can't be explained rationally, that aspect you have got across so perfectly... I certainly enjoyed the read so much :)