I promise

I promise that I will sell  my soul 

For a breath you could take ..

I promise when you get old

And your hair is white 

Then I will love you more than I do …

I promise if you get sick 

I will make the beats of my heart

Be your medicine 

And I will be dedicated for you …

I promise that I will keep my promises 

Even if you hate me 

I will love you forever 

And I will make you the happiest person ever ...

Author's Note

Hope you like that
i wrote this 2 days ago :D

Reviews

[Jane Doe]

I ADORE IT!!!:)
Only thing I saw minorly wrong was sol on the first stanza should be sell but....
I think everything should atleast have one tiny mistake because only then is it ABSSLUUTTEELLLYY perfect!:D
Just an ahmahzing and talented poet you are I really wish to become progressed as much as you are one day

Xoxoxo~ur reader
~abbie
100/100

[Dove]

Sweet. Great piece

[Becky C Strukamp]

Very lovely write.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Everyone hopes to hear these so loving and poetic words, hope someone would say something similar to me and everyone else for that matter and have an everlasting love... Perfection personified as far I'm concerned :)

[Dayran]

Simple and straightforward. Good clear communication.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Cute and full of dedication for someone. =)
though.. first line, *sold should be sell.. just wanted to point it out..
Nice poem though! I like it!

[EMF]

I liked it, but the grammar does need a little attention. In the first line, 'sold' should be sell. Thid line 'that when'' scans better. But what to I know?