I will go ..

Years passed by

And wave for me a goodbye

But I'm still here

In the shore

Looking toward the sea

And waiting for you to come

I'm waiting here

For you to catch my hand

To hold me tight

To make me forget

All these years

 

You came from a distance

I saw you …

You were coming

You arrived

I was opening my arms

You went to others !!!

Held them tight

 

I fell on the ground

My tears weren’t water

They were bloody tears

No .. No.. No

My heart screamed

I want you

My soul shouted

And my mouth

Was talkless …

 

No more words

No more need to live

No more need to my heart

Because it is not beating for you

No more need to my lungs

Because you are no more my oxygen

No more need for my life

Because I’m not with you ..

 

I’ll give you my heart

I’ll give you my lungs

I’ll give you my soul

But before I go

I want you just to know

That I always loved you

More than my soul …

10/8/2011

10:31 PM

Author's Note

i wrote this yesterday .. when i was super sad ..
hope you like this :)
if there is any grammar mistakes tell me ..

Reviews

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

First of all I'm loving the font and format, just beautiful. The poem itslef is grand how you capture feelings and emotions on paper as thry are flowing and still make sense is magnificent.

I’ll give you my heart
I’ll give you my lungs
I’ll give you my soul
But before I go
I want you just to know
That I always loved you
More than my soul …

How beautiful is that!!!???

[Lily Mae]

A powerhouse of emotions..that are very well expressed here. Excellent write..xx

[Thea]

Aw! "I was opening my arms
You went to others !!!
Held them tight"

Sooo sad... :(((

Never mind! Haha! This is such a great poem! :)))
I love it! ♥

[EMF]

Not only are you prolific, you are good.. You sucker the reader in well, and then you play your theme out to a crushing, crashing conclusion.

[LittleMissSunshine :)]

The false start, where she thinks all of her agonizing waiting has paid off was absolutely brilliantly played out.
If you had added in just a couple more lines, I'm afraid it would have ruined the idea. But you played it out perfectly :) I'd love to get to know you better as a poet...maybe some of your knowledge can ahem...sprinkle down to my level? ;)

[Sleeping Maiden]

Stunning piece. I loved it. Your descriptions are vivid and you truely make the readers feel what you feel through this poem. Nicely done!

[Jeremy Baker]

You make this poem come alive with the descriptions of sadness and yearning. Well written!

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My goodness, this is actually wonderful, Bloody tears it felt like you were hurting and couldn't stop crying. When I read more it seems more like a you came back to me plea. I adored your write. It's beuatiful....xo