I will go ..

Years passed by

And wave for me a goodbye

But I'm still here

In the shore

Looking toward the sea

And waiting for you to come

I'm waiting here

For you to catch my hand

To hold me tight

To make me forget

All these years

 

You came from a distance

I saw you …

You were coming

You arrived

I was opening my arms

You went to others !!!

Held them tight

 

I fell on the ground

My tears weren’t water

They were bloody tears

No .. No.. No

My heart screamed

I want you

My soul shouted

And my mouth

Was talkless …

 

No more words

No more need to live

No more need to my heart

Because it is not beating for you

No more need to my lungs

Because you are no more my oxygen

No more need for my life

Because I’m not with you ..

 

I’ll give you my heart

I’ll give you my lungs

I’ll give you my soul

But before I go

I want you just to know

That I always loved you

More than my soul …

10/8/2011

10:31 PM

Author's Note

i wrote this yesterday .. when i was super sad ..
hope you like this :)
if there is any grammar mistakes tell me ..

Reviews

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

First of all I'm loving the font and format, just beautiful. The poem itslef is grand how you capture feelings and emotions on paper as thry are flowing and still make sense is magnificent.

I’ll give you my heart
I’ll give you my lungs
I’ll give you my soul
But before I go
I want you just to know
That I always loved you
More than my soul …

How beautiful is that!!!???

[WriteWiz99]

deep im consumed in ur sight of how deep this poem is

[sugar]

another amazing peice by an amazing writer

[Siddharth T]

Awe-inspiring...

i love the transition from sadness, to happy memories, and loneliness..

[Cherry Lai^_^♥~~]

Love this so much...

[Dayran]

The constant waiting for someone else to take the initiative can be quite weary. To give up and strive for something on your own has greater prospects surely.

[Becky C Strukamp]

I feel your sadness here. Its overwhelming sadness. How many times I had this exact feeling. Brings bad some of those moments. Excellent poem. loved the structure and the red letters at each stanza beginning.

[nevermindfan1991]

I love this poem, so much devotion and emotion expressed in a single poem. I really enjoyed reading this poem. Oh there was no grammar mistakes I could find, but then again I'm not good with grammar. =)

[Sweets]

Great poem! Very touching and sad =/
You just wrote what's on your mind...and that's great!
Great work!, keep going!!