Can you

Can you feel the word

Like  eating or touching a sword ?

 

Can you call the stars

For being  alone in the sky ?

 

Can you stare at the end

As it is your waiting destiny ?

 

Can you light the flame

And burn the world but you are not to be blame ?

 

Can you raise the flag

Of you freedom and hold your goodbye bag ?

 

Can you see me today

Because I’ll be yours from tomorrow !!!

Author's Note

i hope you like this.. i just wrote that and i don't think that there is an idea ...
hope you like this
enjoy :)

Reviews

[MYSELF]

Black,

I read your authors note as it says there is no idea intact yet I would say its a mixed feeling of emotions and thoughts which bind together to remember a loved one.

I don't know if you would agree to my perception but this was what came to my mind.

The last 4 lines

"Can you raise the flag
Of you freedom and hold your goodbye bag ?

Can you see me today
Because I’ll be yours from tomorrow !!!"

which indicated to me as the mind wants to free the soul
yet the passion of love wants to be confined to the love.

Yes I would say that the poem was a bit haphazard yet was a really nice piece of work put together in a simple way..

Good work worth the appreciation..
:D

MYLIFE

[Thea]

Aw, a poem that asks questions! Haha! I like this a lot!!! :)))
Well written...

[Becky C Strukamp]

"can you" what a great title for this.

Can you feel the word
Like eating or touching a sword ?

What a powerful first stanza, and an excellent one. Getting right to the point and point on.

Wonderful Poem.