you and me

Under the moon light

We were sitting

Counting the stars

Going far

All I want to do

Is try feeling you

You talk to me...

Suddenly a light come over

And took us into another world

I saw you there

But I wasn’t recognized

You turned over into a monster

Following me around

Trying to get my blood

I tried to run away

But I was tired

So I give my self for you

And I died between your arms :'(

Reviews

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. ohhhh ... how sad ... sounds like a nightmare ... very vivid and poignant writing ...

[Adelia Alighieri]

This is so fantastic; the imagery is amazing and refined.

[stars are far]

the point of this poem is that someone left me behind and trying to say that im ready to die in him and for his live and the light was another girl took him from me and im trying to be for him but he want me to go or to kill me ...and ...

[N. Scott Cohen]

Started out really interesting, but then I'm not quite sure what happened. Is this literal? If it is figurative, I don't feel that it portrays that quite enough. Otherwise very interesting.