My Inamorato

For Him <3

 

The way his eyes shine when he stares onto the moon

And his lips dance when he smiles especially at noon.

Whenever the moon feels his step moving onward

All of the planets move to make his steps blessed with a ward.

 

All of the angels above are knitting my flowers for him

To make him smile and take away all of his black skim.

Every soul in this world is waiting for that one day

To see him flying in the skies with my love around his bay

 

That pity that he holds in hearth makes everything seem so divine

It makes the Cherry Blossoms, the Daisies, and the red tulips fall like wine.

Those daffodils hide their faces every time he passes by

Assuring me that my inamorato is an angel. Not only a beautiful guy.

 

He is more than a human and I believe that he beyond this realm

For he is the reason of everything in my list of overwhelm

Lilacs, Lilies, Jasmines, Hyacinths, Camellias, and all the roses

They will fall in that day and it will rain just for him in billion dozens.

 

Those clouds will draw his picture on the moon and within the tides

Everything will be about my darling, when we move all about prides.

The world will be him even Saint Valentine will go and tell him

He the world and those red skies, red roses are raining all begging under his chin.

"I will keep saying that I love you for beyond a centillion time "

Author's Note

I was not planning to write a Valentines day poem, but I found that contest and I just wanted to submit hehe

Just wanna say, well every girl loves this day for a certain extent even when we deny it, deep down we love it, since it is all about flowers and common who doesnt love red flowers ? hehe, And if I personally got the chance to send one flower to my beloved it would be a red tulip, because it shows some sort of strong-ness (although it is not my favorite), at least thats how I see it, and the way it stands still that is how my love will be. And well, to every guy even if you are a dollanare, go get your girlfriend a red flower because that will make her happy :D.. and for the single ones, join me :P hehe..

So ... please tell me what do you think of it, and should i send it or not ? (hehe, is it good enough)
and Is the use of inamorato correct ?( i learnt this word recently in one of my courses).
And any suggestions to make it better ?
thank you so much for your time :)

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

So very romantic. You seem to appreciate not only your inamorato, but Mother Nature's beauty too. I loved the mention of so many flowers and the celestial references. It almost seems this is a fantasy lover...."clouds will draw his picture on the moon"....soft an tender. Lovely. Lydi**

[Leslie Philibert]

I don`t know what Inamaroto means, but I love the sound of it and like the poem.

[Mescaline Butterfly]

Very soft and romantic. I get a very pacified vibe from this..delicate in nature. Thanks for sharing

[armin]

Very sweetly done, and I liked the poem for many great reasons like it's beauty, vivid and wonderful description.
My favourite part will be,

All of the angels above are knitting my flowers
for him
To make him smile and take away all of his
black skim.
Every soul in this world is waiting for that one
day
To see him flying in the skies with my love
around his bay

That was a creatively beautiful stanza and your poem is worth of winning the contest.
Good luck and have a nice time Suhad :).

armin. ...

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for the new word "inamorata" .. i believe you have used it quite correctly .. although there are a few other places that language begs a little editing
that being said .. they are small issues that do not detract from enjoying this poem .. it is romantic and has a delightful, playful innocence that charms
E.

[~]

A cute and romantic verse for your loved one. I like your imagery and vivid contrasts.

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Wow beautiful poem enjoyed reading it..........beautiful use of words :)

[wordman]

you are a loving person,a great write

[R Smith]

extremely romantic Suhad, it should be a very worthy entry into your challenge, a special write, bravo :)

[stars are far]

Thank you so much, so glad you liked it Richard :)

[Raja Anjana Kothapalli]

"I will keep saying that I love you for beyond a centillion time "

Beautifully penned thoughts on Love!

Loved your imagination and metaphors!

Also you have teached me a new word today, inamorato! Thank you!☺

[stars are far]

haha I learnt that word recently :D .
Thank you for your review :)

[Raja Anjana Kothapalli]

Yout are welcome!☺