Make Me Free

Take away the chains, make me free,

Unlock this door which is killing me,

Make me fly again and be that happy bird,

Take those ropes away from my neck

Let me say how much I want to be free,

Free from you, from your love,

Let me fly again, and be that rabbit in the meadows,

I’m not a slave and I will never be

Why did you enslave me?

Untie my veil and make me real

Make me whoever I am,

Just make me free…. One more time 

Author's Note

not a poem, just a free verse, to express, to say...
not my style, but these days im into this...

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

"I'm not a slave ... Why did you enslave me" and "Untie my veil and make me real Make me whoever I am," are very telling lines .. such a profound love hate thing going on .. the speaker can only be a victim by agreeing to it .. yet the desire for freedom is powerfully expressed ... there is something repugnant in the pic .. laying blame for forgetting how to breath yet wanting the stigma to remain .. this is a very emotive poem ... so much underlying currents that pull this way and that .. whew! its exhausting!!
E.

[stars are far]

I do agree with what you said, because lots of words are left between the lines, they cant be expressed....thank you for your time :)

[Tai Ryens]

Your words express the entrapment you feel from being trapped in a relationship and the longing for the person who trapped you to set you free quite well, and I have to say that it isn't a nice feeling at all (for it is quite exhausting). You wrote this piece very skillfully, stars, well done!

[hardeep sabharwal]

Make me fly again,,

How simply and nicely you conveyed such feelings, a nice work to read, good job :)

[Don't just B, but B ama..]

Very good, aside from the freedom of love, I like how your portray the sadness and are so descriptive. You could feel the pain. Excellent, Thanks, Merry Christmas & Happy New Year.

[Misha]

thanks for sharing, its nice and full of things normally left unsaid

[MsJewel]

This is a poem - a free verse poem - and it is lovely..well expressed emotion and easy to read.

Outstanding writing!

:) Julie

[Avinash]

Love can be too heavy at times. But yes everybody like to romance the idea of love. Not everyone can handle.

[Mila]

Simple, nice poem. Not being a poetry expert, I can't say much critique wise, but you did a great job with this one. :)

-Mila

[R Smith]

moving on from a love no longer felt can be a hard thing to do, your tale gives a taste of how to deal with feelings no longer wanted, say it plain Suhad, you demonstrate great strength :)

[Sanjh]

This is nice Suhad, Well written and well expressed.
I always try to write poetry in the form of free verse but always end up rhyming it...:(
Thank you for sharing...:)