A Date

you told me you loved me then why did you go ?

"  Hello, tomorrow, the park, I will be waiting"

 

toot, toot, toot......

 

Eight words changed my day... 

My heart beat fast and my face turned blue..

 

You said your words then hung up the line

I thought its old, but its something really new..

 

As our flashbacks hit my vision with my teary eyes

My soul sob and my heart is dimmed.

 

My beats started to get louder and my sobbing is killing

If you heard my tears you'd know you'll never deserve me.

 

Next day...

 

I know I cried like hell last night, but I did... I went

I dressed up with my hot red color, and left..

 

With full confidence I walked in, and saw you there

Sitting under the tree with your deep eyes and your look..

 

I smiled like I never cried.. I walked in ..

You said you missed me and I knew its a lie..

 

I looked at you.. as you were expelling your lies.. 

I inhale.. Look at you.. And say.. "heh.. I thought I loved a man"..

 

And forever left. Thinking, dreaming, and planning another date..

The date that we will never have ..

 

( we under a tree, me between your arms again.. just like before.. no expectation.. no lies, no betrayal.. nothing, just our souls wandering in heaven.. our own heaven.. alas, i miss you.. I miss us.. and that was  a day which I always want to have.. I wish I had loved you more.. more like never )

Author's Note

I hope you like .. 23-9-2014

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

Maybe you shouldn't go out with that guy

[Chris]

We don't choose whom we love, just whom we like. Many undertones throughout this poem ,,,a lot of hurt.

[Lydia Shutter]

Unrequited love....nothing quite as painful. You can't erase the feelings you felt, but you can move on...for your survival. Very emotive. Lydi**

[Sindu]

Such a passionate story! You penned the raw emotion very well, her pain and her love. Love hurts and you showed it. It's nice to read how you transitioned all from a phone call to the two days time in such few lines. Incredible!

[R Smith]

I love it and am putting it in my library, so much passion and the dreaminess of the last stanza, its all just so beautiful, bravo :)

[stars are far]

aww that means alot to me, thank you for your support :D you made my day hehe

[R Smith]

you are always welcome :)

[Leslie Philibert]

This has a nice form, a prose poem with a lot of tension in the form, like the use of punctuation.

[Briana O'Connor]

I like the way you tell a story here from start to finish. Very interesting style. I love the uniqueness. Thank you for sharing.

[wordman]

I like get a new boy friend soon

[Hitchhiker]

Taking it to the hilt is this tragic tale of love mishandled. I am a firm believer that love causes more, much more pain and suffering that anything else in this world. I like your dark poem, and adorn yourself with that "hot red color" and let love come to you.

[Lyn Anderson]

A tortuous arduous paining love. Unrequited, and unsatisfying. Hopefully the speaker has turned the page.