My Dew Eyes

you told me you love me, then why did you leave

As you put your hands around my nick, come closer

And when your nose starts to sniff every flavor.

Your lips starts to whisper “I love you baby”

When my soul is flying to the seventh sky.

 

As your heart beats gets faster when we hug

And mine hit the trees like a thunder that hit a rock,

Your cherry lips combined with mine like the H and O2

As I felt nothing except the water over my face.

 

I cried because of happiness and a hugged you so tight

You wiped my tears away and make me feel alright.

As this dream is going on and my smile is getting wide

I wake up to see myself alone, in my bed with a tear in my eye.

 

I looked at my phone wishing to see a message from you

3;20 am , the time was and I thought that it was time of dew

But flowers were still awake talking about me and you

As I smile to them from the window, with my eyes full of tears.

 

I could do nothing, but get back to sleep as usual.

I wanted to sleep not to continue my dream

But to run away from the thoughts that were killing me

I slept to forget, but every day I wake up  with your thoughts instead,

Author's Note

I hope you like , 5;05 pm
ps: H= hydrogen and O2= oxgyen haha

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Again, you capture the feeling of the sudden transition between past and present, the sudden jolt that stirs us from our slumber with the terror and fright that we feel upon waking, realizing that everything is not as it seems. Truly a woeful tale of the heartbreak lingering over your speaker, and it is very poignant in the way you suddenly change from tears of happiness to jolting awake from a dream, a lovely dream that haunts like a nightmare. Well done.

[Leslie Philibert]

saf puts poetry in a context, in real life..excellent

[Ayushi]

"Your cherry lips combined with mine like the H and O2
As I felt nothing except the water over my face."
Lovely lines...
Beautifully expressed ..

[Diana Moon]

This poem captures feeling. But in my opinion, anyone who calls you baby is not the one you should love. Instead go to the one that calls you beautiful or handsome, but anyway great job!

[Stefanie Holmes]

This was a beautiful piece that truly captures a raw emotion. Well done! :)

~Stefanie

[Einstein Noodle]

such a deep deep pain .. rivers of H and O2 :)
E.

[Eve Ola]

I wake up to see myself alone, in my bed with a tear in my eye.
Simply I love it!!!! throughout your dream n then rest part its beautiful. going to my favorites

[wordman]

feelings of love quiet dreams wishing you were here thoughts great write