Will We Ever Meet Again ?

you told me you love me , then why did you leave ?

Will We Ever Meet Again ?

 

When our days ran out, and our dreams were worn out

as our future is finally destined, by your stupid doubt.

My heart fell from tears and ran between the foot of the crowd

when my eyes swam in their lake, and my mouth didn’t shout.

 

sun rays were sending me our memories as a flash

when, for the first time, I couldn’t smash.

I wanted to throw everything in a dirty trash

But my love to you was more brutal than a clash.

 

I was so young, wild but never free as they say

I made you my years, my months ,and even my fun day.

You were the only one that I would beg to stay

But he left me in a dark night and burnt my way.

 

My last words were jumping right out of my eyes with no claim

After my mouth spelled I love you with no shame

My eyes whispered : will we ever meet again ?

When you answered :maybe, and all I said I was Amen.

Author's Note

i hope you like :)
14/7/2014 ,6:38 Pm

Reviews

[Kasey Miriam]

Love this piece. Very well structured and it hold very strong emotion

[raj24]

May be...i loved that last line..hope has two sides..it keep u holding sumthing for long n make u its slave n the other it gives u the power to move on n make the change..i believe u will make the better choice..keep smiling n keep sharing ur love..its amazing reading them..:)

Raj

[Tai Ryens]

Usually your poems, or at least the recent ones I've read, have centered around the candle of love slowly flickering away into oblivion following the cold wind the door makes when it's being slammed on its hinges while your significant other goes off on his way, never to be seen again, and it was truly a lovely turn of events that this one started with the same cold wind, and ended with the gentle flicker of hope as the candle is re-lit.

That gives me an idea for a poem.

Nonetheless, truly a lovely piece from you, as always, stars. Keep it up.

[ASHIDASH]

I really like this. You have captured the emotion of sadness which lies in this poem in a touching manner

[Einstein Noodle]

i think these lines are strong:
"My heart fell from tears and ran between the foot of the crowd
when my eyes swam in their lake, and my mouth didn’t shout."
i think some of the rhyming borders on being trite .. a rhyme just to rhyme if you know what i mean .. but exercising rhyme is always a positive endeavor .. the story is universal and easy to relate to .. i like the ending being left open to perhaps meeting again .. i didnt expect it to end that way :)
E.

[Eve Ola]

a very beautiful poem. i found it sweet "My eyes whispered : will we ever meet again ? " very nice

[wordman]

well I liked this little sad poem