Let Us Be One

Let Us Be One

 

All those night that have passed in these centuries

And all the days that hid lots of mysteries.

With every vow that have been expelled under a tree

And every word that was said to thee.

 

The moon beamed with our names on it

And the sun rays collapsed when it saw us dread,

Every tree leaf have saved it beauty for the day

When you and I will expose our love to light.

 

Those love stories have been said and retold

Day by day they are getting used to and become old,

Our love was so green and really fresh

So Romeo and Juliet now are I and you my prince.

 

Let the history cherish our names and love story

In its lines and in every piece of its soul ,we will stay

Let us be a rhyme that every one refer to

And let us be one, not me and you.

Author's Note

Hope you like it :)

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

Such a beautiful love poem, stars. I think everyone should get a love poem like this at least once in their lives. Your writing is only getting better!

[Stefanie Holmes]

"And all the days that hided lots of mysteries." 'hided' isn't a word. You would want the word 'hid' here.

"Every tree leaf have saved it beauty for the day" This should be reworded to read... "Every tree leaf has saved its beauty for the day"

"Let us be a rhyme that every one refer to" 'refer' should be the plural form 'refers'

This was a beautiful love poem. :) I really liked the picture you included at the end too!

~Stefanie

[MsJewel]

A beautiful poem of love and romance. You have touched my heart...

:) Julie

[Stephen]

Whoo... Honey's on fire! Ha!

Lovely write, that guy's so lucky with whom you spent your nights and who left a mark on you. He's a lucky guy. The poem's filled with the beauty of love with the fragrance of yours. You've defined the whole world in the few words. I can imagine through this write ..and title that how two lovers can be one at the night in the same bed. Just 5 minutes thrill gives 'em everything they want to be one..to be loved whole night into the arms of someone. Nice concept. Now a days, we new age folks always write such kinda pieces n want love, love and just love to release the fire from body by colliding the bodies to each other because this's what that's called love and everybody wants to be one now a days because they know what they want is already on front of the world.

"Kisses on eyes, kiss the lips
Kiss the thighs, we put the life on risks
Lonely bed and 5 minutes thrill
Colliding the bodies
Sticking together to feel the feel of every love sip."

Keep Writing!

[stars are far]

hahah let us be one... meant more like let us not get separated by anyone..just be together through all..not in bed !!!!!!!!!!!!!!..
that you so much for reading this :)

[Stephen]

Cool! That doesn't even sound bad. It's sound good. lol
Every one has their own ways to interpret the feels .. the feelings of hearts of loved ones ..in the lonely room of someones'...just to hold from the waist jumping on the bed to beat the pulse...lol
...O' I think, that poem's seemed a naughty poem ... cus, it did take me to the other direction, thank god, you clarified the concept or else ...the poem'd have really collided the demon and an angel's body. Thank God. Am again saved.

It's always my pleasure to read your stuffs, pretty.

[stars are far]

hahaha... Be an angel to understand my thoughts..no demon can hit the target between my lines :D

[Stephen]

Opps!
Yes, Ma'am ... but to eat an angel, I think, I should be a hot sexy demon cus, Angels love hot demons cause they know what they want only hot demons can give. Ha!

[stars are far]

LOL ..........

[Leslie Philibert]

Like it.
The first lines should read ( I think, just my view !)
All those nights that have passed the centuries
All those days hidden in mystery
With every vow expelled under a tree
And all those words spoken to thee..

[wordman]

.loved the write and the graphics thaks for the friend req

[maria ( rose)]

aww,, I more than liked it- So Romeo and Juliet now are I and you my prince. love that line, great love story expressed beautifully.
maria rose

[Mindolluin]

Very .. beautiful. I am not sure what the word is in english, but this makes me feel sad or melancholic. Especially liked the part
"Let us be a rhyme that every one refer to
And let you be one, not me and you."

[Tai Ryens]

These words sound like the breathless whispers of a lover pleading to the other, reasoning that everything looks oh, so much darker in the night. Well done.

[stars are far]

Thank you very much :)