Happy Birthday My Ex

A disappointment was filled in this lonely mind

And those pieces of my broken heart flied

Writing your name on the moon and at the sky

With a tear that crossed my soul and the limits of I.

 

When I woke up today that tear was driven to my cheek

Making my sadness fill my heart to its peak

Imagining that this day which I always planned to you

Where you are spending it with her, ignoring my smiles

 

I drew this day on that stones beside our dating place

And on that tree I itched 14^th of March the birth of the grace.

That sea also have my secret birthday plan

And those trees hold the balloons in their leaves.

 

The sky cried so heartily today , and with no other word

The sand is not all wet so that she can’t step on my vows

The tress are now sleeping so the balloons won’t fall on her head

 

And that is, O, my dear friend, you are angry too…

You are trying to kill her, is that true?

Your anger can’t be covered with any smile you give

And your everything is screaming so loud, are you calling his name?

 

Baby, oh my sweet lover you were once

Here you are now gone, gone very far

I don’t know where or even how..

But I wish you have a happy birthday my only star..

 

happy Birthday for you My Ex..Extraordinary person <3

Author's Note

yup.. hope you like..
and hope him a happy birthday :)

Reviews

[Eric Pudalov]

Such stunningly good writing, Suhad! I can tell just from this piece that you are very talented, and have the potential to keep on growing as a writer.

I especially enjoyed lines like "Writing your name on the moon and at the sky/With a tear that crossed my soul and the limits of I." So much meaning and feeling in just those two lines, and I can feel the honesty with which you wrote them!

I have a couple of critiques, however...in the third stanza, second line, you say "And on that tree I itched 14th of March the birth of the grace." I think you meant to say "etched," but I'm not sure. Also, in the 4th stanza, third line, you say "The tress are now sleeping..." - was that intended to be "tress" or "trees"?

Other than that, I think the poem is great, and I would really love to read more of your poetry! Excellent job.

[stars are far]

Thank you very much for your kind reviews and It really mean alot to me..
And that is right i guess they are typos .. Thank you again very much :)

[cycy]

uuuummmmm, okay the poem is really great but i dont wish him a happy birthday though :p

[Raymond Federle]

The bitter-sweet passing of time, always moving forward in life and love...well done! :)