Happy Birthday My Ex

A disappointment was filled in this lonely mind

And those pieces of my broken heart flied

Writing your name on the moon and at the sky

With a tear that crossed my soul and the limits of I.

 

When I woke up today that tear was driven to my cheek

Making my sadness fill my heart to its peak

Imagining that this day which I always planned to you

Where you are spending it with her, ignoring my smiles

 

I drew this day on that stones beside our dating place

And on that tree I itched 14^th of March the birth of the grace.

That sea also have my secret birthday plan

And those trees hold the balloons in their leaves.

 

The sky cried so heartily today , and with no other word

The sand is not all wet so that she can’t step on my vows

The tress are now sleeping so the balloons won’t fall on her head

 

And that is, O, my dear friend, you are angry too…

You are trying to kill her, is that true?

Your anger can’t be covered with any smile you give

And your everything is screaming so loud, are you calling his name?

 

Baby, oh my sweet lover you were once

Here you are now gone, gone very far

I don’t know where or even how..

But I wish you have a happy birthday my only star..

 

happy Birthday for you My Ex..Extraordinary person <3

Author's Note

yup.. hope you like..
and hope him a happy birthday :)

Reviews

[Eric Pudalov]

Such stunningly good writing, Suhad! I can tell just from this piece that you are very talented, and have the potential to keep on growing as a writer.

I especially enjoyed lines like "Writing your name on the moon and at the sky/With a tear that crossed my soul and the limits of I." So much meaning and feeling in just those two lines, and I can feel the honesty with which you wrote them!

I have a couple of critiques, however...in the third stanza, second line, you say "And on that tree I itched 14th of March the birth of the grace." I think you meant to say "etched," but I'm not sure. Also, in the 4th stanza, third line, you say "The tress are now sleeping..." - was that intended to be "tress" or "trees"?

Other than that, I think the poem is great, and I would really love to read more of your poetry! Excellent job.

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Thank you very much for your kind reviews and It really mean alot to me..
And that is right i guess they are typos .. Thank you again very much :)

[Stephen]

Opps! Poor guys!
Time has been passed away. Your this poem expressing the truth that time never awaits for anybody. 14th. March once it was a day when you both lovers were one but today it's became a day where time has left you all alone.
So..pretty...go n focus on you study now..lol
The world is became wicked n it is filled with evils n more u put yer steps into this wicked world..more you will get pain into the depth of your beautiful scented heart so... keep it pure n safe for that handsome guy who will keep you into his heart not on his under neath.

be safe.
your feelings are emotionally get poured into the words as a poem.

Stay Wild!

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HAHA thank you very much for this review..and actually its all better now.. HISTORY :D
and life is muc better.. dont worry haha..even when it was one day of my exams when you breakup yet i passed WITH HIGH MARKS :D.. haha..
thank you somuch :)

[Stephen]

Lol...
Glad to know your HISTORY is clear. Ah..than god..lol
But..hey..what ya mean by "WHEN You BREAKUP"?????
Haha

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hah oh sorry .i meant he*

[Stephen]

Lol. .it's ok..I just thought for a while that it was me who painted your history...haha.thang god iy wasn't me...but "he"...lol

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hahaha,..yes sure.. :D

[Stephen]

Omg!
You said...yeah sure. .it means....he has really painted your history...so..now is everything ok??? Or now is there any chance for me to take a chance to paint you n your history or not????? Hahah

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hahaha... LOL

[Stephen]

It means. .I got a chance. Cool.
Haha

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DID NOT say So

[Stephen]

Great. .then it means am saved.
Haha

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hahaha. YOU WISH :P

[Stephen]

I wish much...
But it's not a matter of what I wish but what you bliss...ha

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:$ :$ ..............

[Stephen]

Nice smile...lol

[Katherine]

This is perfect!! Its very deep, sad, but happy notes too!

[Bowers]

happy birthday to your Ex, but even so I hope your doing even better, and possess a strength you might not have had before.. You have so much talent, you do... this was very emotional, and so many can relate, so that boost up the inspiration of the piece.... you have courage, and talent that many will envy. I admire that.

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Thank you very much dear.. your words really made my day :)

[Bowers]

Great! thats so good to hear! your welcome! :D

[MsJewel]

Even though a relationship ends, there are those that still hold a special place in our hearts. You are a wise person to realize this and to wish this person a happy birthday. Hopefully, your heart has found happiness as well.

Hugs, Julie

[Leslie Philibert]

A very personal write, filled with emotions we understand. Who has not lived through things like this ?

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that is very true.. and well i write stuff which i cant say ..
Thank you :)

[Tai Ryens]

To still recall the birthday of the one who's hurt you and wish him well is truly a mature reaction. You write well, keep it up.

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Thank you very much..
and how can i forget his birthday when i did plan for it ,every second ??

[LamiaCor]

Absolutely....whoa. While reading this, I could really feel the emotion in your words. It's also the sweetest piece I've ever read. I don't know anything about love and ex's but...well, I'll just say, this is deep.
Amazingly done.

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Thank you :)

[Stefanie Holmes]

Deep, emotional piece. Usually I'm not one to wish an ex a happy birthday, but you can tell they had an impact on your heart while reading this piece.

~Stefanie

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I dont usually wish them..but this one is really different to me./.
thank you :)

[Asif Bhat]

emotinal .......intellectual....and awesome

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Thank you :)