Left Me Forever

Should I be crying with every raindrop

Or should I just fly to the ecstasy and to the light?

How did you plan all this in your head ?

Or did you imagine me falling dead ?

With every stab you gave me in the back

I tasted the sweetness of your love and your bye

And when you called us to be apart

I wished my soul flew with no return…

 

You want the truth while ignoring my pride

It’s been a month but I still cry.

What does she have better than I

And why did you leave me forever ..

Author's Note

I just hate that truth ..

hope you like

Reviews

[Blue]

I hate that kind of truth, too. Anyway, this is good but there are just few minor errors which I hope you don't mind my correcting?

*every rain drop -> every raindrop
*With ever stab -> with every stab
*my soul flied -> my soul flew

I can quite relate to this piece. Well done!

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Thank you very much and sure .. I corrected them :)
And yes, sad truth :( ..

[Blue]

My pleasure, Suhad. Things only get better, trust me.

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I hope so. :)

[Tai Ryens]

I've always found love to be enticing in the least solely because of that: how the endless slurs of dedication and eternal love can turn against anyone at the whisper from the significant other. Absolutely poignant and heart-wrenching, Suhad, you express yourself well, as always.

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Thank you very much

[Frieda P]

That last stanza is killer, it tucked it all up in a neat little darkly wrapp'd package. Sometimes denial is the best place to linger with this kind of angst. Amen.

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thank you very much ..and yes you are right

[Frieda P]

My pleasure stars.

[Dayran]

Coming to know oneself is the first step in love. Nicely done.

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thank you so much

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Cool stuff yet again.. :-)

Keep Sharing..!!

Good Wishes..!!

[cycy]

"How did you plan all this in your head ?
Or did you imagine me falling dead ?"
wow, this one is really intense and emotional. very strong poem indeed and so full of pain. my heart goes out to you dear.

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Thank you so much for reading it ..
and i really thank you

[don't know]

Written from the heart and sincere and emotional can feel your pain. "never believe in forever ... because that forever is also the end " some one said that to me. :) nice write.

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hehe yeah .. it is actuly true ... and well when you are blindly in love you believe the skies can be green if the lover said that .. thats heart..not mind..

thanks for you review :)

[don't know]

very true love has that power. Your most welcome. :)

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that was true love !

[don't know]

you put the emotions you felt into words well.

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still feeling .... and thanks :)

[Katherine]

This is so honest and amazing poetry too!

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thank you so much Kat :)

[untitledramblings]

You're inspiring me lol, now I'm in the process of writing about 3 things. I like this because it's so true to life and emotional

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Im glad that i inspire you :)
and thank you so much :)

[Leslie Philibert]

A sad write that impresses with honesty, I bet you really feel this way.

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You got that right..
Thank u :)