From Falling Stars!

From falling stars comes a laughter

Greater than no other

The echo precisely sharp as if to say

Pay attention here me know

Listen to me as I speak.....I'm not you dictator

I simply show you the path that you have the potential to lead

Take me as you want..

HEED my warnings, give them thought

Or brush them away

Love you I do

Guide you I will

but i'm not inside you..so I really cant force you

But I need you to at least know I'm here

Look at this path..let its cracks be you guidance

Jump on it, stomp it, feel it ,touch it...LIVE it.

Bend it as you want but dont you dare ever 

bend it to the point of breaking 

because once you break it your done for

And let me tell you if you someday rise to the top

At least live your life with decency ... be Kind and Love 

beacuse if you reach the top in Spite and by being cold and alone

When you get their and look at all the little undermines you"ll see youve lost in the end

Just By having No one to spend it with

So take Heed and feel my warning

Child you've got this great life ahead of you

after all you were born a laughter

so live you life with joy

Take heed and feel a mothers warning!

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

Well, whilst whispering "G-rated" I Love You's under my breath in regards to such an eye-opening and fresh new look on the heart that gets overlooked through the diction usually, YOURS is proving to be quite the tutor and study of one that livens up some really beautiful phrasing. With only three misspellings and the weird part in the second and third stanzas that begin with "but/but" and "bend/bend", my only selfish wish, would be to hear you read this aloud on a video for sound, so I can hear how YOU interpret the lines you wrote for me to read. If we are able or allowed to bring you to our futures, can we share with you the process of learning and sharing together the many different things that will inspire and teach you, too?!! I Love how the very form of this poem takes on the approach of what I would find in a motivational speech, with the beginning coming to front and center as a wonderful introduction to purpose and that of an intention that also sets the pace and gives me insight as to where you may be going with this, and then each new stanza has the beginnings of something new you are bringing to the table. The last stanza, though this part sounds a bit strange in wording "you were born a laughter", was a perfect addition and ending to how I perceive our country's smartest and youngest examples to learn from..... on display!! Beautiful, Xena..... xooxo -Your Mark

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

GOOD WARNING AND meaningful write
also funny

[sakshi arora]

your writing is mature than your age in an intelligent way and yes high school is one of the best times of your life enjoy and make memories :) i really liked your poem

[Xena the soon to be 9th grader]

Thank you.. your poem put a huge smile face.. you me beaming! Thank you for your nice comment!