And my aching

And my aching,

 

In bed the clicking heater

and the silent

dark and deep

night

slow static on the lake

and your heavy breathing-

from the other room.

Reviews

[Mr.Boffin]

really like this piece...short but very descriptive and vivid

[dede1015]

The emotions and feeling pulled me in. Overall just amazing.

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good use of words. Create thoughts and vision in the short poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Vidya Bacchus]

you put a lot of feeling into your words.Good write keep on writing.

[Layne]

I like it very much! I've read a few of your poems and they all have this depth to them like an open wound. I really like your writing style; I think it's great.