Americanisms

i've wanted to say this for a long time, but never found the right words. suddenly, i did. -enjoy-

 

Words never spoken

Could save a life

Time of/for guilt

But no one does

Deathbed proclamations

Became jokes

When death became mundane

But no one notices

Fads toy with our emotions

As rubble and arms lay smoldering

And C students turned leaders

Point fingers

At fictional wrongs

A*s covering tactics employed

Play wars fought with breathing soldiers

Open arms held out

To hopeless/helpless people

Flying high on empty

Without leaving the ground

Not knowing mistaken as not being

Fear puppeting

The once puppet master

Stigmas portrayed as facts

That kills the survivors

Hanging by toxic threads

Slowly burnt by our clocks

While warped, exclusive beliefs

Write laws that control our fingers

“Welcome to America,” I say

the most…”powerful” country in the world

protectors of everything

who am I/we/us

to challenge them?

Simply the true elite section of the population

But what do we know?

Reviews

[Dennis Shanaberg]

Damn. Excellent one here.
The passion in every word shows that you really feel everything that you are saying here. I've got a few pieces that run along the same lines.
Speaking of which:
Play wars fought with breathing soldiers
That line is beautifully written. Fantastic imagery and powerful as Hell.

Keep it up.

PS- Idk if I can write a PS on a review, But here it is. I really liked the points where you put the slashes (ie hopeless/helpless). It adds a unique voice and style to the poem, that separates it from all the other people out there who might try to write the same idea. Also, they were well placed, to add to the meaning of the poem.
Anyways, good job.