I enjoyed how you personified time as an ocean. We perceive time that we're conscious of, but we're not simultaneously conscious of all the time that we exist in. We float above this temporal ocean one wave at a time, one moment at a time. There may be shortcuts such as the speed of light, or wormholes that take us to other points in time. Perhaps death is a time machine since it enables our perception to jump over eons of time to other nesting grounds of incarnation. You must be from a mathematical background in that you used the term “common denominator”. We have no idea about all the places that we have been in time, or will be in time because of our limited retention of memory. It would take an infinite memory to enclose an infinity of past times experienced, an “infinite enclosure”.
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10 Years Ago
Woww really like your explanation of the text thanks, i am not from a mathematical background but i .. read moreWoww really like your explanation of the text thanks, i am not from a mathematical background but i do find common denominators useful in lots of things in life and find them valuable in finding out what is fundamental to something, thanks for the review :)
10 Years Ago
You're welcome! There are threads of commonality winding through the fabric of diversity, those harm.. read moreYou're welcome! There are threads of commonality winding through the fabric of diversity, those harmonious common denominators of unity.
I like the imagery here, especially the ping-pong ball. However, my biggest complaint for this piece is the over-use of the verb "to be" (is, are, was, were, am, etc). Remember that when you're writing poetry, every word counts, so try to avoid the weak verb "to be" if a stronger verb will fit.
I enjoyed how you personified time as an ocean. We perceive time that we're conscious of, but we're not simultaneously conscious of all the time that we exist in. We float above this temporal ocean one wave at a time, one moment at a time. There may be shortcuts such as the speed of light, or wormholes that take us to other points in time. Perhaps death is a time machine since it enables our perception to jump over eons of time to other nesting grounds of incarnation. You must be from a mathematical background in that you used the term “common denominator”. We have no idea about all the places that we have been in time, or will be in time because of our limited retention of memory. It would take an infinite memory to enclose an infinity of past times experienced, an “infinite enclosure”.
Posted 10 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Woww really like your explanation of the text thanks, i am not from a mathematical background but i .. read moreWoww really like your explanation of the text thanks, i am not from a mathematical background but i do find common denominators useful in lots of things in life and find them valuable in finding out what is fundamental to something, thanks for the review :)
10 Years Ago
You're welcome! There are threads of commonality winding through the fabric of diversity, those harm.. read moreYou're welcome! There are threads of commonality winding through the fabric of diversity, those harmonious common denominators of unity.