Spoken Words Of....

A repost of subiota, aka iota also known as flow~

soft drums ease into the stillness of the room.

electric guitar strums a smooth melody

across smoke filled air and blank souls.

no one notices as I grip the microphone.

 

I have an insatiable love affair with women

a romantic interlude of expectations, soiled

by my internal battle of right and wrong

lusting for their flesh while admiring their minds

 

what I can’t control I devour and return it in words

easing the pressure from within enabling me to breathe

I can’t catch my breath since my eyes won’t relent

on taking in their beauty in all of its beautiful shapes

 

it is my desires that first made me submit to her

worshiping God’s greatest creation since the birth of eve

I am forever damned to be in awe of her physical beauty

only her love for me has the power to save me from sin

 

I am free style, free flowing , spoken word.  Erotic Poet!

some of my work is about love,  all my poetry is about women

my pen allows me to ease the unsatisfied desiring pain

my poetry balances me so that I can live in reality

 

soft drums ease into the stillness of the room

electric guitar strums a smooth melody

across smoke filled air and blank souls

no one notices as I release the microphone

Author's Note

comments and thoughts

Reviews

[Alex P.]

Iota, I have got to say, (though I really don't want to, since I adore you) that this poem isn't one of your best. It took me awhile to realize what and who you were writing about, (but when I did and reread, it made more sense) I don't know if it's my inability to think right now, but your flow still seems a bit off, kind of stops and starts. With the imagery that you have at the beginning and end of the poem, I'd expect that you'd want the flow to sustain throughout, but it is kind of jerky in the body of it. I think that you can definitely make a better impact by spacing the lines and stanzas differently. But that's just my opinion honey!

[Ruth]

The femaile essence, the beauty of music, the rise and fall of shimmering chords in-between!
This is a great poem, one that has stunning flow too!
xx

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I like the first verse and last verse... and the body too.. those two verses are a bit haunting .
Can love save a person from sin? Perhaps.. beautiful poem.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

a sleek and sensual ode to body female~ female soul~

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

it is my desires that first made me submit to her

worshiping God’s greatest creation since the birth of eve

I am forever damned to be in awe of her physical beauty

only her love for me has the power to save me from sin
yes that line caught my attention in specific her love has the power to save me from sin..:) well written..

[deeps]

This is one amazing write here. I really enjoyed this, very well written

[Randy`s Princess]

nice flow and I think you like women lol jk this is kick a*s I like the train of thought

[Coyote Poetry]

I would listen when a woman is reading erotic poetry. I done many poetry readings when I was station in California and Texas. I can't remember ever a woman whispering the secrets of the dark to a un-friendly group of people. Poetry is a art form we need to rebirth. I like this poem. I remember doing a Poetry bash in Ann Arbor, Mi. Only one's with interest were my two friends. I like the feel and sensation you create with your words. A excellent poem. Took me back to some good days.
Coyote

[Therene]

I like how you opened the poem. It's like a concert opening act. :D But this is a little weak. I can feel that you have a stronger feeling deep inside. It seeps out a little but then recoils to introversion. Also /the only thing that can define me better,
is the love of a good woman./This good be expanded to make a better form and stronger voice...Nice imagery, to say the least.

Keep writing. :D