Tempting Blues

I am a lover of the blues

Like gray skies and a cold breeze

my bones froze from within

pulsated outward to bare skin

 

My life was on hold after

My X vanished, into darkness

increased feelings of, insignificance and insecurities

 

Day after day I walked blindly

One hundred percent numbed

To the world and life around me

 

I heard your melody

Felt your vibration

A bluesy electric guitar sensation

 

I felt your warmth, embraced my soul

Spiritual bliss captured, within your voice

Our souls danced like blue flames

soaring high on Gabriel's wings

“The sun rises in the east

And sets deeply in the west”

Your voice sung sweetly into the wind

 

Your silver cross jingled between

The whiteness of you soft cleavage

Beneath your red succulent kissable lips

 

lost between carnal lust and eternity of damnation

resistance was futile, Ms. Pied Piper is what I called you

 

Forever in hell over eternity in heaven

If every day could be spent with you

I would gladly give my soul to the devil

 

“The sun rises in the east

And sets deeply in the west”

Your voice sung sweetly into the wind

 

I felt the warmth of your lips on my skin

Your kiss released my soul to live again

insignificance and insecurity melted away

 

I followed your voice as it lead the way

“The sun rises in the east

And sets deeply in the west”

Tempting Blues played melodies in my head

Reviews

[Goddisia]

Forever in hell over eternity in heaven If every day could be spent with you...
Your poem is at once so subtle and yet so vivid. Love is such an incredible journey, perilous at times, and then at others eye-opening. The cold deserts of pain and the blazing infernos of abandonment - what do we really learn there? Is it necessary to be broken in order to be restored by kisses that resease the soul to live again? The music in your words is beyond seductive...

[JustaGurl]

oh wow i love this, i like your use of words to describe it all, keep it up

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

this would make such a dreamy song.. for some reason i think of bon iver as i read this..

deft hand with the repetition.. not overwrought by any means..

[Coyote Poetry]

So powerful. So many strong lines. I could read the poem many times. Emotion and desire get stronger with each line. Ending was very cool.
Coyote

[Jacqueline]

Darling you don't simply love the blues...you seem to live for it! Ah when helpless souls give into their true love and desire...it is thrilling and scary! This piece is buttery mellow but I could still feel the rush...

[NoxLamia]

You say I have talent?? Take a second look at your work and your surely mistaken, :) This was a wonderful piece and I fully agree with Luna that you caught the emotion fairly well.

[deeps]

This is one amazing write here!
I like this alot. It flows so wonderful and is wonderful.

[Luna]

That is very sweet. You captured the emotion perfectly and I like how the title goes with the piece. Maybe adding some comas into the stanzas would help it out but other than that it is very well written.