The Goal of the Girl

The man used the key beneath the mat to unlock the door. He threw his hat and jacket on the couch as he headed for the kitchen. Suddenly, he was aware of a squealing noise coming from the upstairs. It stopped and so he proceeded on to the fridge and took out a soda. As he opened it the sqealing began again, louder this time, and more urgent he thought.

Adrenaline coursed through his veins as he shot up the stairs to his daughter's room. By now the squealing had changed to a vibrant, undulating, shrieking sound, as though there was a murder being committed.

With a bound and a shoulder he crashed through the girl's door, brave father and rescuer.

And there she sat, with her bagpipes.

He gave her his disapproving look, and she said:

Hey, someday I will play these pipes at Carnegie Hall.... so get used to it.

 

Reviews

[B3AUTIFUllY INSAN3]

Wow. I can see mina pulling that one off. That was good.

[luciddreamer]

I found myself losing my breath with your character to save his daughter....very good writing :)

[Mark Wallace]

Had to read this after what you put in the description line, and I have to disagree, this is pretty funny.
I definitely didn't see the last line coming. I even laughed, a little. Good disguise in the build up.

"I understand the inventor of the bagpipes was inspired when he saw a man carrying an indignant, asthmatic pig under his arm." - Alfred Hitchcock

[bunny nabber]

Hah ha ha;)

[Scott M. Sandridge]

It's a very humorous story. It was a bit anti-climactic after all that suspenseful build-up, but seeing as that was the goal of the story that's only a trivial critique. Overall, good job.

[Judy]

I do not call this crappy. It does show the determination of a young person to overcome the disapproval of a parent to pursue her dream.