Parasite

A real look at methamphetamine addiction

Now I am a force of the darkness

for I, have given away my soul

My addictions are my obligations

and so........the sickness grows.

 

Thru clear blue eyes and with

Articulation.

My spoken words are only tricks and lies.

The demons I harbor do not need you,

and if you go with me, you'll die

 

I do not function in accordance

with the laws of society

Ignorant entities support me,

and so the Darkness feeds.

 

Do not think for an instant,

that I am your friend.

That my friend, would be a grave error.

My real intentions, are never spoken.

And my Demons, I will not ignore.

 

If you think that you can help me,

please keep this thought in mind:

Your pathetic offers

are offensive,

and your assumptions waste my time.

 

Dont be a fool, you cannot trust me

For my spoken words are only tricks and lies.

I am a carrier of disease

and if you go with me,

you'll Die.

Em Am B7 Em   Dm Am F C Em    Slow, Melancholy

Reviews

[Mokey]

Wow! Really great rhythm with this one! :) Nice job of portraying darkness. I wanted a bit more of the contrast between the way the narrator APPEARS and the way the narrator really is. For instance, the part about the clear blue eyes was nice. It helps the audience understand why someone might mistake this person for someone friendly or good. Nice job! :)

[Dirk]

Hi, Tony! :o)

This a wonderful poem about addiction, and I must commend you for writing it. I know one thing that is a true constant when it comes to drug addictions: painful emotions are the source and drugs are used to medicate the pain. I love this work because you capture addiction so well psychologically. Distrust of self extends to others inasmuch as the addict projects - distrusting his/her friends and loved ones.

I loved reading this, Tony. You have provided us all with a gift by affording us insight into the mind of your subject. I am very impressed.

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

this poem is great. it shows that the narrator is all about being themself with the good parts and the bad parts together. the unreluctance to give into letting others force you into change is great. i love this poem.

[ANNA]

Rhythm was smooth too my lips! I could understand every word and I loved this poem
Creepy in a way but i like creepy..
A message was formed in each spoken word as you wrote or typed them out
I feel that this will be my fav. For I have not read all your work but at this moment I like this one more
And your vocabulary is very impressive. i only wish I could get better at mine. Though reading more of your work makes my reach for my stars

Thank you for sharing

Anna

[TL Boehm]

vivid - chilling truth about the menace of meth. Articulate - to borrow a word from the poem - precise. Well done.

[E York]

Wow, a person who can actually write decent rhyming poetry! You know it's a good rhyme scheme when the reader doesn't pick up on the fact that it rhymes right away. Anyway, I had to review this because I wrote a story that was actually called "I Am a Parasite," which was also about a drug addiction, though it was about cocaine, and it was written from the perspective of the drug instead of the addictee. I thought that was kind of cool. I'll have to get around to uploading it one of these days so you can read it. I'll send you a message when I put it up, and if you have the time, I'd be great if you could check it out.

My favorite part of the poem was the first two stanzas. You really grabbed my attention and held onto it. Normally if I don't like the beginning of a piece of writing, whether it's poetry or a book, I don't finish it. Yeah, that's probably not the smartest thing on my hand, but what can I say...

[Raef C. Boylan]

I enjoyed this a lot; I like poems that convey the sinister throught tone and language as well as content.
The rhyming and rhythm are great, as Mokey below me says; you used subtle and imperfect rhymes as well as perfect, which made the structure less of a distraction and more an aid for the flow.
Great job. Good application of vocabulary without seeming over-contrived, like you resorted to the thesaurus for every word. Impressive.

Thanks for posting this, and thanks for all your reviews.