Puff

Puff puff breathe.

Reflect a moment.

How am I here?

I had such great dreams.

Sky high aspirations

Now don't mean a thing.

 

Puff puff breathe.

Appear deep in thought.

Ha! I'm as deep as a sink,

My own wisdom stale;

Middle-aged mediocrity

Drowned in dry smokes and warm ale.

 

Puff puff breathe.

Display nonchalance.

Day in day out

Life is always the same.

I exist to exist

But go to bed in shame.

 

Puff.

Let go of the perfect gal.

Puff.

Disgraced the artist I was.

Breathe.

Became just another face.

 

S**t, there's the work bell.

Snuff my Marlboro. "Hmph."

Thought I said I'd never smoke.

Then again, I also was the hero

Of a story never written.

Reviews

[Sean]

I enjoyed this a lot. The pattern of the first few stanzas were cemented by the break in the last two. I like it when a poem can change it up and even more when I can walk away from it feeling satisfied for having read it. You had great imagery and succeeded with this one.

[Tai Chi Italy Take Two]

You, John Stussy, Are a banging poet, writer, musician, and generally all round wonderful young man, and don't you forget it. You are young and highly talented already! we have to make mistakes in order to learn. You are, and will continue writing the story, because this is what we do.

Have you been watching the world Cup? We just got hammered by the Germans. I would quote a Faulty Towers line, but I'd better not!lol

Smiling at you

Tai

[allwrite]

Good write my friend. As always, it speaks to me.

[Celtic Cat]

OH.. and my review...
p1.. story of my life
p2.. hell yeah, i, uh, play millipede, ha
p3.. argh.. how many poems have i written on this? (refraining from pulling my hair)
p4.. ouch, sorry. humbug, only disgrace is for an artist to put down all mediums, which you ain't.. already addressed the face
p5.. love this.. yep, snap the poet back into reality, and you're still my hero.
bah humbug, i say!
also
the puff puff breathe is a wonderful lullaby.. really weaves the woe together nicely and hums in my head. excellent poem!

[Celtic Cat]

Oh that story is being written, my friend, and I scoff at the "became just another face" stuff. Humble this stage may be, it is our stage, and to hell with what we do with the rest of our time, so long as we are free to speak here, openly, poetically and anything but mediocrity. So snuff the butt, pour out the warm ale, suck in some sunshine and just be. write on, you are your heart and your future can begin any instant you chose. You know. peace.

[floarealbastra10]

we all feel that way, one time or another, well done

[Akina]

this is a great poem John.
I loved it, it's so wonderful and deep. and I just love the ending, amazing written :)

Akina

[Kathryn]

This piece is really fabulous. Love the imagery, the existentialism, the cynicism, the dry, smokey tone and atmosphere you created. The last stanza was the most powerful; brought everything home in a neat, little package. Beautifully real.

Keep writing.

P.S. Reminds me of a piece I wrote: "One More Cigarette, Honey?" Little bit of a different theme- jaded by the opposite sex rather than society, but might be an interesting read if you like poems similar to this style and feeling.

[XxVampyrCandyXx]

"Thought I said I'd never smoke.

Then again, I also was the hero

Of a story never written."


I really like this part. Very good write, enjoyed reading it.

[deeps]

I love this write i liked how you summed it up at the end, kind of gave ne a chuckle,

Puff puff breathe.
Display nonchalance.
Day in day out
Life is always the same.
I exist to exist
But go to bed in shame.

Isn't this the truth too, I like this, wonderful write here.