Mirror Evil

Just a little bit of a writing experiment...

 

 

Whisper to me something sweet,

Tell me something you really mean.

Convince me the ending is far,

That the story has only begun.

 

I’m weak in the afternoon sun

Shriveling up and dying slow.

Keep me safe until the night

When the time comes I’ll show you…

 

 

dnim ruoy hguorht gniklats rellik eht m`I

.rorrim eht ni gnireel ohcysp ehT

eb ot detnaw syawla ev`uoy feiht eht m`I

.nis krad teews fo tnias nortap ruoY

yks thgindim eht hguorht uoy ediug ll`I

.htaed ruoy ot llafeerf uoy tel ll`I dnA

 

 

Tell me you love me dear,

Dance the night away with me.

Feel the magic of our love

Make me believe it’s so strong.

 

I’m weak in the afternoon sun

Shriveling up and dying slow.

Keep me safe until the night

When the time comes I’ll show you…

 

dnim ruoy hguorht gniklats rellik eht m`I

.rorrim eht ni gnireel ohcysp ehT

eb ot detnaw syawla ev`uoy feiht eht m`I

.nis krad teews fo tnias nortap ruoY

yks thgindim eht hguorht uoy ediug ll`I

.htaed ruoy ot llafeerf uoy tel ll`I dnA

 

.nos ym yawa remmilG

.yrolg s’ti thgin eht eviG

dnah ta esolc si ruoh tsekrad yM

.doolb ruoy ni ehtab I sa niap ni leveR

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[Babbette Francis]

dnim ruoy hguorht gniklats rellik eht m`I
.rorrim eht ni gnireel ohcysp ehT
eb ot detnaw syawla ev`uoy feiht eht m`I
.nis krad teews fo tnias nortap ruoY
yks thgindim eht hguorht uoy ediug ll`I
.htaed ruoy ot llafeerf uoy tel ll`I dnA

I love this idea. very original. The poem was great!!

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Whoo, what a poem. My eyes are worn out from reading the mirrored words now. lol I like it and the flow is wonderful. Very nicely written, great job!!!

Heather

[~amanda~]

**sighs dreamily** as a really romantic girl, i often feel like this... my favorite line is "tell me something you really mean"

i also LOVE the mirrored verses! that is sooo awesome! im thouroughly creeped out but so enthralled... this would be sigmund freud's favorite poem im sure =)

[☮]

Definitely different. I enjoyed the reverse text (mirrored, of course). The hopeful vs. the sinister. Very creative.

I wondered why you changed the style for this line in the paragraph before the last one:

And I'll let you freefall to your death.

.htaed ruoy ot llafeerf uoy tell ll`I dnA

Thanks for sharing this one. Nice write.

[FoolsGold23]

*cross eyed but marveling* wow!! Had to school myself to read sdrawkcab but the title certaintly helped me unravel the layout in a goodly amoutn of time. Gracious *rubs forehead* haha, I need a mirror next time you pull something like this! ;) But seriously, this is a great, and unique poem!! (Ive never seen one like this, it's pretty awesome!!)

[Mysteral - Night Prowle..]

This is excellent. To me, a very original way of writing poetry. The whole piece makes me think of Jekyll and Hyde.
Not sure if you realized, but:
>>.htaed ruoy ot llafeerf uoy tell ll`I dnA
You spell the mirrored 'let' with 2 l's as 'llet' is that intentional?

[Leah]

SWEETNESS!

I'm the killer stalking through your mind
The psycho leering in the mirror.
I'm the thief you've always wanted to be
Your patron saint of sweet dark sin.
I'll guide you through the midnight sky
And I'll let you freefall to your death.

Glimmer away my son.
Give the night its glory.
My darkest hour is close ot hand
Revel in pain as I bathe in your blood.

I've had this thought about creating a mirrored poem, looks like you beat me to it.
BRAVO DUDE!