Sanity?

Inspired by some Nirvana music. :)

Silly smile plays on my lips,

But it hasn't reached my eyes.

Calmly I watch time pass,

It's inevitability swallowing my mind.

 

My friends whsiper to me,

Not demanding action

But keeping me company

In this twisted world.

 

You were never there for me

You always told me it would heal.

Insanity pounds deep in my head

And opens wide the wide blue veins.

 

No pain in this body

I've lost the feeling.

All that I feel now

Is this hollow happiness.

 

Silly smile still is here

I'll keep this lack of feeling.

I'm not lonely,

My friends stay with me.

 

You were never there for me

You always told me it would heal.

Insanity pounds deep in my head

And opens wide the wide blue veins.

Author's Note

I'm fine. Happy actually, and genuinely so. Just poetry, inspired by Nirvana

Reviews

[Gandré]

And I have seen your moment with Nirvana music. Less the notes but more the feeling between the gaps. I totally adored your stanza "No pain in this body

I've lost the feeling.

All that I feel now

Is this hollow happiness." ----- seems like a human can switch off what he wouldn*t like. I loved your metaphors. great write. thxx.

[♥ Courtney &hear..]

i loved it


:-D sooo soooo soo amazing

[Mysty Rayn]

Powerful. Knock me down powerful.

[Gandré]

And I have seen your moment with Nirvana music. Less the notes but more the feeling between the gaps. I totally adored your stanza "No pain in this body

I've lost the feeling.

All that I feel now

Is this hollow happiness." ----- seems like a human can switch off what he wouldn*t like. I loved your metaphors. great write. thxx.

[Lia]

Really great piece. Very strong, well done x

[Last Lying Look]

nice. I really liked it. Good job! :D It really got me.

[Enigma]

Whoa!! That was quite....umm...what can I call it...strange, perhaps. Coz' writing such a tragic and depressing piece in a good mood!!! Wow!! You're on great writer or a poet..or whatever...lolz
I never actually heard any song of nirvana, but seems like they have powerful lyrics within them...
As for the poem, it was strong picturing a really sad scene infront of my eyes. Man! Am I glad that this was all imaginations or what!?!?!
Anyways, I really liked the flow and the raw emotions which are practically driiping right out of my computer screen...lol
Very good indeed....
AWESOME!!! ^_^

[Tai Chi Italy]

Yep! I get this completely John, just keep on truckin on....smiling at you, wishing you a wonderful weekend, Tai x

[Mr. Lopez]

Very nice poem. There is beauty in the bitter sullenness of hallowed mental chaos. Rock on !

[Jessica Benfield]

nice. =] a hollow happiness. i think thats my favorite part X3 sanity is something most of us have, and insanity is something we all have. nicely written piece! good job!
smiles,
jess