Renegade

Just a few words for the future to any lass wanting to get attached. Bitter? Maybe. Do I give a f**k? Not a one.

There's life in being a renegade

With nothing left to lose.

Tell me that there's nothing there,

Not a hope to gain.

For if there's hope to be at stake

I've got something to fight for.

I've had enough loss in this life,

Don't want something to die for.

So tell me now, oh pretty lass,

That there is nothing here,

For if I have nothing to lose

I have nothing to fear.

Reviews

[That_Girl]

"When you've got nothing to lose then baby you got it all" Right? ;) Good piece. Short and to the point but I wouldn't say bitter, just your opinion is all. People shouldn't judge you for not wanting to get attached or attempt to settle down or whatever. THAT'S silly, not this. :)

[John Stussy]

Heh, thanks. I'll learn from my past's lesson: Getting tied down gets you dead, whether inside or physically. Thank you for reading and reviewing this one, you're a sweetheart.

[That_Girl]

You'll learn. :) anytime hunny.

[ChaoticSoul]

I think this poem in its entirety is really interesting with the color and font you chose. The overall impact is strong and upfront, which fits with your lines really well. Nice work!

[John Stussy]

Thank you, I'm glad you liked this piece!

[Starfruitanimal]

i dig this a lot . the ending is great, says a lot to me.

[Damien Davison]

Heh, nice poem man. I enjoyed this one as well.

"For if there's hope to be at stake
I've got something to fight for.
I've had enough loss in this life,
Don't want something to die for."

Those are amazing lines, seriously. Great write.

[John Stussy]

Thank you for the review man, those four lines are also my favorite part of the poem. Glad you enjoyed my words.

[Ees]

I love, love LOVE this poem of yours! I feel like it something stated by a dark stranger, smoking a cigarette at the edge of a dark alleyway. (also in my head the speaker has the voice of Hayden Christiansen, but that's neither here nor there.)
I like the sense of wild abandon written into this. Everything is right where it should be and your choice of words works well. Great job!

[John Stussy]

Thanks for the review, was a pretty fun one to write. Just a statement, almost a testament, to any lasses in the future wanting to get too close. Hopefully it'll work, else I'll have to resort to the fire hose.

[Ees]

Hahaha. The poem is better than that. The key is to find a lass who doesn't make you feel tied down though. For me I always think of my favorite Janis Joplin song and the part in "Turtle Blues" where she sings: "I ain't the kind of woman
Who'd make your life a bed of ease, ha ha ha ha!
No, no, no, no, no, no, no, no, no.
I'm not the kind of woman, no,
To make your life a bed of ease.
Yeah, but if you, if you just wanna go out drinkin', honey,
Won't you invite me along please."

haha. but that's me.

[Baby Ricochet]

I feel you. Great job

[Frieda P]

I could hardly read after the intro of 'do I give a f**k' haa
It' succinct in it's message, which is you of course. Not sure I agree, 'if i have nothing to lose I have nothing to fear' but those are your ideals. You know that saying, 'no man is an island', I think that pertains to 'love' also. :P

[John Stussy]

Thanks for the review, you give an interesting perspective. As for myself, I've been living as an island quite well as long as I've got my poisons and art to keep me company, life stays simple this way.

[Frieda P]

Well, you're just smarter than me. :P I keep going back for more.

[John Stussy]

Haha, it happens. Ain't smarter, just weaker and less tolerant. Got the shorter end of the stick too many times for my liking and then found the key to simplicity.

[Frieda P]

Can I make a copy of that key please?

[John Stussy]

Sure haha, have at it, though perhaps you ought to keep your heart open and your hope alive. Some find their happiness that way.

[Frieda P]

I'm on the fence at the moment, but having the key might be a soft place to fall.

[John Stussy]

True enough I s'pose, though the death of the romantic spirit is a thing wept for by all artists alike.

[Frieda P]

Alas, more inspiration. :)