Better

Just letting a snippet of the past free from my mind with a little bit of mental bleeding. Enjoy, or don't.

I chased for you
Like the baying hounds,
Offering years
Of wasted breath
On a ceaseless hunt
To bring you happiness.
I flew to the moon
To bring you its light,
Sailed the roaring oceans
Of your desolation.
You'd wander away,
Order me to fight,
Then pass through my arms
Like a cold shameless wraith
Right into those of another.
You'd drink down my words
Like cold, sweet water
Then leave me with ashes
Coating my tongue.
And still, the fool
That ever I am,
I'd continue to give
And for you alone live
Until one day
I'd said no more.
You sounded the whistle,
Bid the hound to chase,
And chase I did.
But not to save,
I chased to kill.
The mess that was us
Erupted in flame
And upon my shoulders
You laid the blame
For you becoming
So terribly ugly,
Claimed that I'd built
My perfect monster.
I've carried your words
And savored the dark,
Flaying myself
For my alleged deed.
When all of a sudden
A light came to me,
An epiphany
As pure as gold.

Without your chase,
Without your games,
Without your lies,
I'm better.

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Pretty phenomenal write...women thrive on that ability to beckon (shhh, don't tell Them I told you *laugh*) and when you boys don't come when we call, well, it turns our pretty little worlds upside down...and we lash out. I absolutely love your epiphany here, and I love this piece. Superior. Well done.

-kimmer

[John Stussy]

Meh, joke ended up being on me haha. She's happily married now or something a friend said. I'm an alcoholic now m'self, and still better off than I was with that b***h. Thanks for the insider tip on women. :)

[KAOlmsted]

Just sang Joe Jackson in my head...awesome. :-D (And it is my pleasure...I like your work)

[writing mojo]

I can tell your soul sustains a lyrical dragon which in movement leaves a fiery flight of music to the imagination..good stuff

[John Stussy]

Aye, I'm a musician foremost, a poet second. The words just kind of fit into their rhythms naturally because of my music. Thank you for the review, and for reading my work. I'll be sure to return the favor.

[Starfruitanimal]

i feel that , well you wrote the story of someone i know. thankyou

[John Stussy]

It's a tale that's been acted out many a time, this particular fool's going to avoid dancing that dance ever again though. Glad you liked this.

[Kaylor Mason]

Deceit, thy name is Woman

[John Stussy]

Haha, much agreed.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

great write, full of reflection and deep emotion. I really enjoyed this piece.

[John Stussy]

It's not one of my bests, was mostly just letting thoughts out. But thank you for reading and reviewing this poem, I'm glad you liked it.

[MissEpic2902]

This is amazing!! Bravo!!

[John Stussy]

Thanks for the review. :)

[MissEpic2902]

your welcome

[Sami Khalil]

I've carried your words
and savored the dark.
A nice write.

[kingblaq]

"Without your chase,
Without your games,
Without your lies,
I'm better."

I'm repeating those words to someone special tonight ;D

this piece gave me strength. Awesome write

[John Stussy]

Thank you for the review, glad I gave you some words for later use.

[Mickey Gonzalez]

Beautiful ;-)

[John Stussy]

Thanks Aunt Mickey.