Folie a Deux

Folie à Deux

So shallow

your arrogant lies;

denial of the truth

in eloquent phrases.

On one page you stroke and please,

on another you bludgeon

with satanic words.

A master of the art of deception,

a man who cannot take the rejection

of a woman

with other than an arrogant scythe

to crop all erstwhile love and respect.

You caused horrific injury

to your innocent victims

then accused them of self-harm.

What kind of person are you?

aye there’s the rub

as your delusions

feed those who cannot

see how hollow you really are.

Reviews

[Kristin Lee]

Such a harsh edge to this one, very emotional. It's a great write though. Those pieces that come from raw passion and emotion are often the diamonds in the rough.

[TL Boehm]

your delusions

feed those who cannot

see how hollow you really are.

applicable on the grand scheme, good vs evil as well as interpersonal relationships. So many are blind when they come upon this type of predator. Well penned

[Archangel Gabriel]

True, very true, many thanks TLB

[Adri Moolman]

really glad I read this love it!!

[Archangel Gabriel]

Thank you so much Adri

[Keith]

Ah yes, some very nasty characters have a charming face, their dark side not seen by all.

[Archangel Gabriel]

True Keith, true.

[SteveB]

Hmmmmm a definite change of pace. Stark and brutal but with some soft touches which give it a touch of the foil to go along wiht the sabre. The Hamlet bit was a nice touch. Too much of the hacking sabre and it becomes a rant, the softening touches such as the Hamlet and the "scythe" line turn it into a poem.

[Archangel Gabriel]

Many thanks Steve.

[Dana Alsamsam]

allusion to hamlet?? in this piece i really enjoyed that you strayed, content wise, a bit from what you normally write about while still keeping the same vengeful tone and i enjoyed it! this was definitely an intriguing read! i don't know if you're open to suggestions, but if you are my suggestion would be that in the first seven lines you state the same thing in a few different ways; when you repeat an image it begins to lose its power. i believe you could condense that into a shorter and more powerful image! overall great work here :)

[Archangel Gabriel]

Thank you Dana for such a considered review.

[Leslie Philibert]

A good poem, full of emotions, enjoyed the borrowing from Hamlet in the last lines..

[Archangel Gabriel]

Thank you kind Leslie

[Mark]

You are so great at the whole 'righteous anger' thing... I don't think I've read anything better at it.

[Archangel Gabriel]

Practice 'makes perfect' lol. I think my Calvinist/Catholic upbringing may have had an influence! Cheers Mark.

[Mark]

wow, that must've been interesting. I was raised very Catholic. Went to the minor seminary when I was 15. Left the next year. I craved the sound of a girls' voices.

[Sarah Conder]

How striking! You have used an excellent choice of words to convey such frustration and contempt.

[Archangel Gabriel]

Many thanks Sarah

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Excellent and vitriolic read Gab as always!

[Archangel Gabriel]

Thank you John