Vacant Death

A Poem by Archangel Gabriel

Vacant Death

You led your pack of feral dogs

through the dark halls of Hades

to seek the flesh of perfect poets

who would expose your psychosis.

But the Angels sought you out

and smote you down

before the distemper in your brain

drove you to complete madness,

and your certain death

from diseased lungs,

breathed from the stinking pit

will be sweet release

to all humanity.

26/06/13

© 2013 Archangel Gabriel

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TL Boehm

I'd like to know who/what inspired this. It foams and seethes in its rage. Love the idea of feral dogs....
Well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago

11 Years Ago

Thank you TLB there are inscincere people on this site who garner others to a sick cause.

11 Years Ago

it is a sad truth - but there are also some amazing types. Real writers. So we purge and we stay and.. read more

SteveB

You constantly exhibit the benefits of a classical education. The ability to express such rage and horror in a beuatiful form, to tie together the hounds of hell and biblical avanging angels - nicely balanced. Good choices of words with the "diseased lungs", "stinking pit" and "sweet release" giving a strong juxtoposition. And "smote" is the perfect word choice as smite has such a specific meaning far beyond mere killing. Well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago

11 Years Ago

Thank you Steve for such a well considered review.

Leslie Philibert

Very tough, well written, I have the feeling you don`t like someone too much..

Posted 11 Years Ago

11 Years Ago

Could be Leslie, not that it happens often! Many thanks

Mark

wow, glad I'm not your enemy!!! LOL good work, was wondering if maybe 'smite' should be 'smote' though? Tense seems wrong to me.

Posted 11 Years Ago

11 Years Ago

Many thanks Mark. And thank you for picking up the tense error I have corrected it.

Frieda P

I think there was blood left on this page, cuts like a knife, good one Gabriel!

Posted 11 Years Ago

11 Years Ago

Many thank yous Frieda

John Alexander McFadyen

Wow Gab this is deep and full of vitriol. Don't let me get on your wrong side!

Posted 11 Years Ago

11 Years Ago

Many thanks John glad you enjoyed

Jack...

Wow, reaching deeply into the dark abyss you, my friend, have managed to pull out a winner here. This has a smooth poetic flow with an extremely sharp edged delivery. This piece slices into the mind and reveals all that needs to be said. Very nicely done.