a chimney romance

falling in love and a warm cigarette

woke up to you

       with one hand round my thighs

       and one hand round a warm cigarette

wisps of smoke rolled playfully out your

       dishevelled, handsome grin;

       makin' a break for it through ivory jail-cell-bar teeth.

and as you ashed into your empty coffee cup,

       black, three shots,

i bent my body over yours,

       hips hovering bouyantly, hands crowning your face

and i kissed that smoky grin of yours

       i kissed it with every muscle in my lips

       and with every breath in my lungs,

'til your tar-stained teeth

shined like lost pearls in a rough sea

 

keys in the front door

      sun reluctantly disappears and

      your fingers mesh with mine,

with another hand i lit a warm cigarette. 

you kiss me as i empty out a glass of wine,

and exhale a thick mist from my crystal lungs.

      your hands on my hips, taking a drag.

they all say:

      if this is love then i don't want none,

      if this is love then you two got it right.

and the moon had peeped its head through our window

moon-beams singin' us to sleep

      amid a haze of smoke, and wine,

      and passion that could'a melted the whole damn city.

and our bodies had intertwined,

      with one hand we held eachother close,

      and the other we wrapped around a warm cigarette.

Reviews

[C.A. Lucas]

You really do like writing about a wasted, body don't you? Reading this, I've ignorantly assumed that you were inspired to write about this drug addict and alcoholic from someone you love. That's okay if it is, but anyway, I love the writing :)

[strangebrain]

I'm just kind of fascinated with addiction, really. Although tragic, it's strangely beautiful to watch someone sacrifice a part of their life to something, with full knowledge that what they're doing is wrong. Whether it's to drugs, sex, self-harming, etc. But thankyou so much for the review!

[C.A. Lucas]

Yes, that's very interesting... :)

[Damien Davison]

This painted such a nice picture, set such an amazing mood. Sounds perfect. The feeling of 'content'. I agree with MachinaWriter, those lines were perfect. They show you see perfection in an imperfect man, true love. Thanks for sharing, it was really great!

[strangebrain]

Thanks heaps! I really do try to focus on the more imperfect sides of life, as most other poets do as well. But, again, thankyou for the review!

[MachinaWriter]

I love your set-up in this roleplay, it plays through the mind eloquently. I love the light you shed on a scene, like a lamp that breaks away shadows and shows the object of your love as it really is. " 'til your tar-stained teeth / shined like lost pearls in a rough sea" Absolutely enthralling. Probably one of my favorite pieces of yours, by far. Thanks for sharing this ^^

[strangebrain]

Wow thankyou so much! That was more than I deserved, definitely. :)