Daddies Little Girl

For the creative poetry group.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Displeasure of a daughter's indulgences

shatter a father's placid heart.

Botheration overcast the minuscle room,

and somberness spreads into tears.

 

Convulsive sobs vibrate his soul,

but she stares in skepticism.

Her candescent eyes question his sorrow,

and torrid anger encircles her.

 

Her sensual ways of living

dresses her exiguous body.

Cerise lips make a pout,

and sarcasm echoes the air.

 

Her father quotes verses from the Bible,

prays for her deliverance,

begs for his little girl to return.

 

She laughs, and tosses her blond hair,

leaving despair behind.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Tate Morgan]

Daughters seem to want to do what they are forbidden to But in time all things come around

[Wolf's Dark Song]

Good job. Very compelling storyline in your poem.

[Tina Kline]

Nicely done. A sad tale in this poem.

[Cassie Fraga]

well done...the tale was expressed perfectly!!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This piece WOWs me! Your writing flourishes with creative thinking... this piece has an intense emotion that is delivered well. Great write!

[Raven Starhawk]

I feel a mixture of emotion in this one. It holds me ever close and even as I finish reading it refused to let me go.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Father-daughter relationship....
daughters certainly are a different breed....
tough for parents most of the time....

[Enigma]

Wow. A powerful poem about how a father and his daughter gradually drift apart. The contrast is well created. Good job.

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful tale in this poem. Hard for a father. Their girls will be their little girls forever. Hard to see them walking down the wrong path. Good story in this outstanding poetry.
Coyote