Daddies Little Girl

For the creative poetry group.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Displeasure of a daughter's indulgences

shatter a father's placid heart.

Botheration overcast the minuscle room,

and somberness spreads into tears.

 

Convulsive sobs vibrate his soul,

but she stares in skepticism.

Her candescent eyes question his sorrow,

and torrid anger encircles her.

 

Her sensual ways of living

dresses her exiguous body.

Cerise lips make a pout,

and sarcasm echoes the air.

 

Her father quotes verses from the Bible,

prays for her deliverance,

begs for his little girl to return.

 

She laughs, and tosses her blond hair,

leaving despair behind.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[David Scott]

It is sad that many Dads can't give their baby girls their unconditional love. A love that would tell them that they are always the apple of their eye.

[KAREN]

Thanks!

[Loner]

A classic write all the way ....

[MoriartyMesa]

Image is not needed cause this is one of those things that stands on its own and sinks the roots deep.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

very nicely described picture...I liked the original style and the topic...even it`s little complicated for me :) ~nia~

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Great and creative story here within this piece. Nicely done!

[Poetic Beauty]

This is quite a unique take on this piece and I like the direction you took it. THis told a story that hand me following til the last line.,

[Warren L.G De Mills]

Good piece, so many fathers go through what you have just described. This piece attracted me because I love your use of language and imagery, my two favorite things in poetry. Good job on this one keep sharing with me :) you are an awesome writer

[Star Wolf]

Very good writing of this sad tale.

[Sarah]

sad but very good

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

great vocab!