Damnation

For the creative poetry group.

Sorrow of terror wakes him.

Hot flames cause him to flick

his body erratically.

Smoke is cascading in all directions.       

Blister of sins rise from his body.

 

Red ignites from every angle.

Evil voices cry out in the smothering ashes.  

destruction boils all around,

leaving moans of pain in its path.

 

His heart feels volcanic,

erupting fear pounds his chest.

Trembling fingers grasp at brunt air.

Smoke stained tears run down his face.

Masses of smut blackens his soul.

 

Complexion is already sanguine

from the inferno heat.

He wishes for a cold rain to

wet his scorched body.

Discoloration is his future.

Soiled mind begs for forgiveness.

A voice from above says,

"depart for I know you not."

 

Searing fire scars his skin.

Punishment of unrighteousness sends

sensation of distress through his condemned soul.

Throat dry and parched cries out,

cracking with despair.

 

Sizzling flesh burn his eyes.

Consuming ring of fire swallows him.

Hot anger fills his lungs.

Agony chokes his emotions,

gasping hot air fuels the flame.

 

He cries out, "free me from this pain."

Temperamental regrets wreak him to the core.

Fierce that this is his destiny,

he wanders around in self pity.

 

Alarm clock wakes him,

sweaty body flushed and in shock sits up and looks around.

Sighs of relief send him to his knees.

 

"God, save me, for I am a sinner.

Take me father to heaven to live

with you someday.

Help me to live a pleasing life,

and thank you for dying for me

and saving my soul.

 

Amen"

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Misty Blue Eyes]

i love how hes tormented in the begining.. great write

[KAREN]

Thank you!

[RienKelsoCinema]

We all make choices in our life and we have to live with the consequences. If there is something after our lives, maybe we really do have to deal with the consequences of our forever-confusing lives.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Whatever denomination, I believe that we a to follow and carry on good examples in our life. Hopefully, I am in a redemption phase.
Very well written with a powerful message.

(Is it me, or is it hot in here?)

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime you can find hell on earth. A strong poem with a message. People who live life without concern for others. Steal and abuse the world around them. Karma is a fair judge. I did like the ending. I believe people who try to be kind and helpful. Will find peace one day in paradise. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Donna Lorenz]

You have done well on this. You had me sucked into your plight. Good ending, good read.

[Tina Kline]

Love this! Talk about a wake up call! This is a really great poem. Its very vivid and intense.

[Wolf's Dark Song]

I like this! At least it was a dream and he realized, smartly, it was a warning. I hope he doesn't forget that and changes what ever he's doing! This is a really enjoyable poem!

[Krystal Nicole]

Loved the descriptions and thank God I will never have to be in such a place. I really didnt see the ending coming but that was a great way to end it. Wonderful job!!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Omg...this was hair raising. The horrors of such a thing...
The ending was perfect. I loved that the most.

[Brad]

a modern day "Inferno"?