What I Am

For the creative poetry group. We had to write about ourselves.

I'm a genteel person,

living in submissive dreams.

Voices so acute and real,

telling me who I am,

or who I should be.

A tender heart

and an optimistic mind

helps me to succeed.

Joyful soul mixed with

a soft sensitive side

keeps me pushing on.

Author's Note

What do you think? Kinda struggled with this one.

Reviews

[mulderigj]

voices so acute and real telling me who I am or should be..

contradictory. subtle voices are telling you (telling, not subtle) who you are or should be.

I think you can go deeper here... is it your voice? Is it others? And if they are telling you, are they really being as sweet as you are about it? Does it make you mad?

Beautiful otherwise.

[Wolf's Dark Song]

I think you did a fantastic job on this poem. You brought it out quite nicely. I think its great & I enjoyed reading it too!

[Tina Kline]

Wonderful poem! This is really great. You did an outstanding job on this. I enjoyed reading this a lot!

[Poetic Beauty]

I love this poem. It is explains who you are and what keeps you going.

[Donna Lorenz]

This ia a short piece but well written of a womans search to know herself. I believe it is perfect!

[WindSong]

I received good feelings reading this poem. Well done!

[Raven Starhawk]

I struggle with writes at times but you must never give up. Sometimes words stick because your brain is filled with routine and what not. That makes sense to me but may not to others. ^^* (coughs) I am old and sometimes do not make sense but I liked this poem.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Cool..!!!

[Shellie]

I like it. I always hover over parts about 'telling me who I am' as my opinion is noone can tell you who are but its really besides the point here I just wanted to include all thoughts i had while reading, but overall i really do like it especially the last three lines and the tone.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is a very clean and sensitive poem.
A delicate heart with a warm touch.